User talk:Mwkimiko1224/sandbox

Maya's Peer Review
The article dives into various of subtopics to the main subject of sex differences in education. It includes multiple races and cultures and how they experience the differences. Something that is also within the article that boost's it is the inclusion of possible solutions and implementations. That way it helps with all the negative in the article. You found good sources that I feel can help with the bias within the article and could change the wording of the article. Some suggestions I have is to assist the other students working on this article by adding to the smaller sections. Like the improvement of sex discrimination in education, especially the subtopics of China and the United States. Within your sand box I saw a new lead section at the top which will add to the article a lot, but I think it can still include more about what it exactly means. The lead now discusses how it affects the future of these people and it would be beneficial to include what it does to them in the moment and where it appears the most. The most important improvement will be adding more sources that are not biased throughout the article. Where can citations be added? Can you remove stuff that is steered too far? Have you checked the sources included already? Are they reliable? What links can be made to other Wiki articles? How can the language be changed to not sound so bias? How can the article include more of a worldly view? Fortunately, I did notice some great things that I would include in my own article. Such as including more of a worldly view. This article made me want to look into more countries and their experiences with confidential birth and also how different people use confidential birth. Is it more of a white person thing or used by all? The subtopics of the article are broad and are touching things that I wouldn't expect, which makes me want to broaden my article to various of things. Thank you for your edits and good luck on finishing Maya! __Bauerkn (talk) 22:07, 17 November 2018 (UTC)