User talk:Mxrlena/sandbox

I think your research is very thorough and your sources are good. The history topic is good, and of course you just need to turn your notes into prose for the wiki. In the history section for your page, you could also add more information about the history of the practice in Cameroon. The current page makes it seem like this is where the practice has originated so it would be good to have some additional information about the origin. A potentially good question to research could be what makes breast ironing a cultural practice that has spread from Cameroon? I think that opposition to this practice is a very good section to help expand especially because of all of the negative effects of breast ironing. I think that the page has a pretty good development of incidence and health consequences so outside of the few points you have on your page your research should be focused on creating potentially a new section on the page all together. Overall, I think that you are doing a good job of addressing the gaps that I have seen on the page. When you post your edits I think that this will greatly help improve the page. Gstock1 (talk) 16:52, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

I think you chose the right spots of the page to pick apart and add information. In response to the idea in the comment above, I feel like there is more information regarding Cameroon than anywhere else, so maybe dig around to see if this practice is happening (or has happened) elsewhere. Your addition of the specifics of the actual act of breast ironing helped to give a better mental interpretation of how it would happen (although very disturbing to think about). I found it intriguing that you added the bullet points of reasons/pros of breast ironing--I find that important due to the tone of the original wiki page. It's important that the page stays unbiased and you've done a great job of that. Jweaver8 —Preceding undated comment added 01:47, 7 November 2019 (UTC)