User talk:Myastone16/sandbox

Overall really good article, I really liked how you took the time to make the draft look like an official wiki article and separating each discussion by group. My few suggestions would include possibly cutting back the second paragraph in the general information one. It begins to get a little wordy at the end of it. Lastly, maybe rewrite the sentence "The ingestion of cysts is when organisms are infected" in the Life Cycle & Morphology section, maybe just to "the infective stage in the organism begins when they ingest a cyst." You don't have to rewrite it, just sounded a little off to me but that's just a personal preference.

Hello! You are off to a great start! I have a few additional comments: - Do you have a reference for the statement that "fections within sheep, cattle, and humans have also been documented"? - Be careful with changes in tense. For example in this sentence: "However, because this protozoan doesn’t typically cause pathology in humans, the number of cases are likely underestimated as they were asymptomatic or were misdiagnosed as E. histolytica." you switch from present to past tense (both were's should be are). - I agree with the peer reviewer above about the ingestion of cysts sentence. Instead, I would say "Infection occurs when organisms ingest cysts". - Make sure you add at least one more reference. Agleichsner (talk) 15:09, 9 April 2018 (UTC)

Hi! Your new article draft is really nice! Here are a few edits:

I see that in the original version of the article it states that this parasite can cause colic, and in your article you state that it is one of the top causes of colic. You also state that most horses will have no symptoms. You may want to add an additional source to your statement about colic to show that it is well supported.

If there are pages for the other tapeworm species on wikipedia make sure you link to them in your final article.

This sentence: "The tapeworm perforating through the intestinal wall and ulcerating the mucosal layer of the stomach at the site of attachment has also been seen with this parasite leading to the intussusception" is a bit jumbled to read. Instead you could phrase it as "Occasionally this tapeworm will perforate through the intestingal wall....leading to intussusception".

The next sentence: "Horses that have cases of infection Anoplocephala perfoliata..." could be restated as "Horses infected with..."

For the diagnosis, say eggs may not always be present instead of they.

A few things missing from this sentence: Proglottids are released on an irregular basis as well (COMMA HERE) therefore multiple tests may need to be CONDUCTED in order to confirm an infection of Anoplocephala perfoliata.

Your first sentence in treatment is incomplete.

You may want to provide some reasons why treating before and after the grazing season is the most beneficial plan (otherwise it is a non-neutral statement).

It looks great! Awesome job! 137.142.128.224 (talk) 16:21, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Assignment: Reviewing an Article
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parasitism

For this assignment, I chose to evaluate the article which broadly defines the term "parasite" and gives examples of well-known diseases caused by these types of organisms.

I found that the sentences were precise, clear, and easy to follow. The article was not biased and provided facts regarding this type of organism's life style.

I found it really helpful that it defined the strategies of parasites, such as the following: castration, direct transmission, vector transmission, etc. The article also included transmission strategies which are extremely important in the continuation of the life cycle for these parasites. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Myastone16 (talk • contribs) 18:49, 12 May 2018 (UTC)