User talk:Mycoolv

Please let me know if you need any help with editing Wikipedia. You can put queries to me on my Talk page or on your own Talk page. Have fun! Hoopes (talk) 17:04, 27 April 2022 (UTC)

I'm having a look at your edits to The Morning of the Magicians right now. I will make stylistic edits to the article itself and will put substantial comments regarding content here. Please note that there is another student in the class, User talk:Danielwiskur, who has also been editing this article. You should review each other's work in order to maximally improve this article. Hoopes (talk) 19:30, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

One of the things I'm noticing is that it would be a good idea to be consistent in how you refer to Welteislehre, which has multiple possible names: "Welteislehre", "WEL", "World Ice Doctrine", World Ice Theory". "Glazial-Kosmogonie", "Glacial Cosmogony", and "eternal ice theory" (the term used by Pauwels and Bergier). I think it is important to be consistent. Given that Welteislehre is the name of the Wikipedia article on that subject, perhaps that or "World Ice Doctrine" (its direct English translation), is the best term to use. Given the nature of this "theory", I think the term doctrine captures it best. Hoopes (talk) 19:41, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

I've carefully reviewed your edits and have made some of my own to the material that you added. Please note that I have changed some of the subheadings and shifted some of your content around, putting the issues of sources and critical thinking in one subsection while keeping the specific case examples in their own sections. I have also added some hyperlinks to other existing, relevant articles. I think that the content you have added is good. It definitely provides a more robust explanation of the book. I don't think that the section that you added on World Ice Doctrine is excessive, but you might consider whether some of the details might not be more appropriate to the article on Welteislehre--as well as adding some language to that article in order to point back to The Morning of the Magicians as a key source for reviving World Ice Doctrine and introducing it to an English-speaking audience just as the 1960s counterculture was emerging. Hoopes (talk)