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=Bruges= Within the city of Bruges there exists a system of canals connecting the North Sea to the heart of the city. ) For a time these waterways were vital to the city’s commerce. Inconsistent topography and difficult weather conditions limited Bruges’ ability to maintain the trade industry. Construction of a deep water channel hoped to revitalize the cities prospects of becoming a major sea port, but the efforts were unsuccessful (Vernon-Harquart, 1896) The canals are now largely used for transportation and tourism . . Canal tours offer unique views of historical homes, meuseums, a medieval hospital, and other significant sites. (Dawe, 2004) The Dijver Canal runs alongside the historic Belfry.

5/7/2019 Evaluation of Bruges by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 06:28, 8 May 2019 (UTC)

This is a Talk page. In the future, create a separate sandbox page, which will allow your peers and myself to leave commentary on the talk page to that sandbox page.
 * Points: 32/40
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Does not meet standard.
 * "...revitalize the cities prospects..." city's. (It is possessive, not plural.)
 * "meuseums" should be 'museums'

Language
Meets standard.

Organization
Does not meet standard. This paragraph is not a complete whole, but written in a haphazard way.

Coding
Nearly meets standard. There are some code errors.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Meets standard. There is enough here, but it could be formatted better.

Relevance
Meets standard.

5/16/2019 Peer Evaluation by Jjher7030
Points: 39.5/40 Grade: 98.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds standard. Perfect spelling and grammar with a neutral narrative.

Language
Exceeds standards. Fittingly encyclopedic narrative, good job.

Organization
Meets standard. Add a header so I know where this is meant to go.

Coding
Exceeds standard. Perfect code.

Validity
Does not meet standard. Stating facts without citations is not within the proper format.

Completion
Exceeds standard. Complete.

Relevance
Exceeds standard. All ideas and information are definitely relevant to the witch trials topic.

Summary
All of your sources are relevant to your topic and you’ve created an interesting submission while staying within the confines of encyclopedic narrative. However, you are short the obligatory amount of sources, and the bibliography that contains them could be mush cleaner and better organized. Aesthetically, I think it would make the most sense to break your paragraph into two equal-ish sized ones. Great effort. Jjher7030 (talk) 03:19, 17 May 2019 (UTC)

5/16 Peer Review Done by Jacob Peebles: 41/45
Spelling/Grammar: 3 points "cities all around rothenburg descended into a chaos with witch hunts, trials and executions" This sentence does not sound right to me, maybe try adding a period after "witch hunts".

"Fearmongering" ?????????

You are missing a period after the sentence about cascading effect of accusation

Language: 4 points. For your final draft, try adding transition words so it doesn't sound like you are listing things off.

Organization: 4 points. I do not see a header at the beginning of the paragraph that ties everything together. Also, try to split up this information into 2 paragraphs.

Coding: 4.5 points. Great Job

Validity: 4.5 points. Great job

Completeness: 4 points. I feel like you can add a lot more information to make this edit even more interesting to the common reader

Relevance: 4.5 points. Great job

Sources: 4 points. You need 10

Citations: 4 points. There are a few spots where I see direct facts with no citation after. Like "Rothenburg burned over twenty suspected witches between 1578 and 1585"

References: 4.5 points. Great job

The second Spanish Flu Outbreak in Plymouth
European Outbreak

The Spanish Flu spread quickly across Europe, with outbreaks occurring in different locations in quick succession. In a matter of months this influenza virus killed more people than any other pandemic in recorded history. While it is widely accepted that the movements of troops during the first world war spread a considerable amount of the virus, commerce also played a role in the circulation of the disease as. goods and currency exchanged hands, and were moved into and out of ports across the world. The flu evolved, and mutated as it spread, with secondary and tertiary waves of infection.

The 1918 virus did not only infect humans. It is believed that the disease also infected animals such as horses, cows and pigs, and also migratory and coastal birds . Due to the composition of the 1918 virus, it is thought to be a predecessor of the modern H1N1 virus. . During the first world war, virologists have confirmed that the British army, in order to feed the millions of troops, added wild ducks and geese into the soldiers meals, introducing the virus to human populations. . The physical stress of combat combining with the unsanitary environment and exposure to chemical and bacterial agents provided the virus a perfect situation to incubate and mature. The specific origin of the initial outbreak has been debated to no consensus, however the genesis of the second wave is widely accepted amongst epidemiologists and virologists to be the harbor town of Plymouth on the southern coast of England.

Plymouth England

Plymouth has a long history of maritime activity, both commercial and naval. Today it is the site of one of the largest naval bases in the world. The constant volumes of traffic permitted the virus to migrate freely around the region. It was there that the virus is thought to have mutated into a deadlier strain. This port was a part of regular routes between Boston, Massachusetts(The Spanish and Freetown, Sierra Leone. Spreading the contagion from Europe to ports in Africa and the United States. The Sierra Leone port city of Freetown was a stop on the way home for many of New Zealand’s returning soldiers, who then brought the Spanish Flu to the otherwise isolated island nation . Plymouth’s port records also have shown that Plymouth and Davenport were common ports for the Chinese Labor Corps  Thousands of migrant workers landed here before moving on to Kent by rail, promoting contamination that would soon infect destinations around Europe and the world. Between October of 1918 and April of 1919, the English population suffered 280,507 . Spain- The first western European country to see high mortality rates was Spain, hence the designation ‘Spanish’ Flu . . Between May and June of 1918 the fatality rate was 1:31 per 1,000 people. Spaniards between the ages of 15 and 44 saw a 52.6% mortality, Ages 65 and older 12.3%, Ages 0 to 4 accounted for 5.8%. Estimated total deaths; 290,531 Around 3\4 of the casualties died in a second wave of viral outbreaks, with October of 1918 accounting for approximately 45% of the total deaths. That October, a Spanish priest in the city of Zamora neglected to enforce a ban on public gatherings in order to conduct group prayers. The death rate in Zamora grew to the highest in the entire country.

France- France too experienced elevated mortality rates, affecting age demographics similarly to Spain and elsewhere. Between August of 1918 and April of 1919 alone, 360,686 people in France succumbed to the pandemic.

Germany In 1918 the German Army alone reported 14,000 influenza deaths, though it is thought to be higher, and the German army minimized the reporting of its losses. Between March of 1918 and January of 1919 there were 581,243 German fatalities, considering both military and civilians German soldiers during WWI did not consider dying of the flu to be a noble or heroic way to die. To romanticize many inglorious deaths, the death certificates simply read “den Heldentod fürs Vaterland” (a heroic death for the fatherland.)

WITHOUT THE HIGHLIGHTS

The Spanish Flu spread quickly across Europe, with outbreaks occurring in different locations in quick succession. In a matter of months this influenza virus killed more people than any other pandemic in recorded history While it is widely accepted that the movements of troops during the first world war spread a considerable amount of the virus, commerce also played a role in the circulation of the disease as goods and currency exchanged hands, and were moved into and out of ports across the world. The flu evolved, and mutated as it spread, with secondary and tertiary waves of infection. The 1918 virus did not only infect humans. It is believed that the disease also infected domesticated animals such as horses, cows and pigs, but also migratory and coastal birds

During the first world war, virologists have confirmed that the British army, in order to feed the millions of troops, introduced ducks and geese into the soldiers’ meals The physical stress of combat combining with the unsanitary environment and exposure to chemical and bacterial agents provided the virus a perfect situation to incubate and mature. The specific origin of the initial outbreak has been debated to no consensus, however the genesis of the second wave is widely accepted amongst epidemiologists and virologists to be the harbor town of Plymouth on the southern coast of England.

Plymouth England

Plymouth has a long history of maritime activity, both commercial and naval. Today it is the site of one of the largest naval bases in the world. The constant volumes of traffic permitted the virus to migrate freely around the region. It was there that the virus is thought to have mutated into a deadlier strain. This port was a part of regular routes between Boston, Massachusetts and Freetown, Sierra Leone. Spreading the contagion from Europe to ports in Africa and the United States. The Sierra Leone port city of Freetown was a stop on the way home for many of New Zealand’s returning soldiers, who then brought the Spanish Flu to the otherwise isolated island nation.

Plymouth’s port records also have shown that Plymouth and Davenport were common ports for the Chinese Labor Corps. Thousands of migrant workers landed here before moving on to Kent by rail, promoting contamination that would soon infect destinations around Europe and the world. Between October of 1918 and April of 1919, the English population suffered 280,507 Spanish Flu fatalities — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mzgatpdxdotedu (talk • contribs) 23:35, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

6/14/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 14:31, 14 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 32/40
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.

Language
Meets standard.

Organization
Does not meet standard. It's really unclear to me on where you are imagining this material to appear. The stuff about Plymouth seems like it should go on its respective article, unless you make a clearer case that Plymouth was a very specific node in the European and worldwide spread of the disease, which you do seem to allude to.

Coding
Does not meet standard.
 * Headers are not properly formatted.
 * There's a strange block quote.
 * The references do not use any of the proper templates.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Meets standard. There's certainly enough material here.

Relevance
Meets standard. It seems to be relevant.