User talk:NCekoric/sandbox

You've already created a solid core for your entry, so what remains is just some revision and expansion. Here are a few elements to consider: Please touch base with any questions.
 * the target was 300-500 words, and currently your body draft is at 201.
 * trim uniquely from ornate at the beginning (seems a little hyperbolic)
 * don't forget to add links to other Wikipedia entries
 * maybe clarify the distinction between the way the linen fabric signaled humility but so many other aspects you mention seemed calculated to indicate her high status
 * your sources look terrific, but the footnote numbers are usually done in superscript in Wikipedia--just use their citation tool so that they follow their style
 * I had difficulty finding free-access images, too, but these seem to be:http://earlymedieval.archeurope.info/index.php?page=saint-balthild-of-ascania-details-of-the-chausuble
 * the point made parenthetically at the bottom seems interesting/important enough to be interwoven (sorry, I couldn't resist) into the main text. Since this is a Wikipedia entry, and not a thesis-based research paper, you don't have to take a position, just sketch the relative merits and evidence for each view. It could be brought into the final part of the main entry, perhaps?

AMcClanan (talk) 22:50, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Response, Bethany Johnson
You give a lot of good descriptive details for the chemise and cross. Could you maybe split these into separate sections? Maybe you could also define what a chemise is as well, or give a one to two sentence background for who Belthide and the queen were (what was she queen of?). It would also be helpful to have some information on where these artifacts were found, or where they were from. — Preceding unsigned comment added by BethanyJJohnson (talk • contribs) 00:51, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Rick Benson
You describe the Chemise very well. I also like that you noted there are conflicting information from your sources. I also had run into several sources offering different ideas and wasn't quite sure how to handle it. Id like to know more about the history, when was the chemise made, who was Balthild? Maybe you could also add some links if there are already existing pages for that information and some images. Good luck! Rkbjunior (talk) 07:00, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

From Prof McClanan, 12/3
Just a quick follow-up. I'm not seeing the Unit 2: Edit a Wikipedia entry post (1pt) so please email if I'm overlooking it. Touch base if you have any questions as you wrap up your entry's edits!

AMcClanan (talk) 02:25, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Prof McClanan, 12/7
Excellent work on crafting content on a challenging topic.

AMcClanan (talk) 23:11, 7 December 2018 (UTC)