User talk:NP824/Spatial inequality

Potential Article Changes
Hi NP824! Great article! I think you're doing a great job of creating an unbiased article. Your article gives clear facts, and is presented in a relatively understandable way. I also think this is a great improvement from the previous spatial inequality article. You really expanded it and included different aspects of spatial inequality that were not mentioned before. I also really like the first sentence and the lead section.

Even though you have done an amazing job thus far, I would like to see some changes. To begin, I think it's important that you include accessible language. Certain terms used in this article are not very friendly to nonexperts. Some examples are when you use "multi-faceted analysis" and "price volatility and instability" without explaining what they mean. I think that changing how you use these terms would make your article more accessible. I also think that you should add pictures to your article.

There are two important things you could do to improve your article. The first is to add links to your article from other articles. This is how people will discover your article and see how much meaningful work you have done. This is a very important part, and since your article is so broad, you can likely reference this article in many others. The next important thing I think you could do to improve would be to mention the intersection between race and spatial inequality. Throughout history underprivileged racial groups have been removed from their homes and forced elsewhere. This is an obvious way that the government has abused spatial inequality to keep these communities impoverished and underserved. I think this is an extremely important part of spatial inequality, especially since we can still feel the effects of racial migrations today.

Overall, you have done a great job improving this article and I'm looking forward to seeing more of it throughout the semester.

CatherineGCC (talk) 21:02, 24 October 2022 (UTC)

Article Feedback
Hi, NP824! Your article is great! You have done so much to improve the article, and you did well on adding to the quality of the article. You did a great job on creating an unbiased and well-sourced article, and you covered different topics and perspectives in it. I learned a lot from this article, and that means you achieved your goal of creating a valuable article.

Some paragraphs of your article seem like they could be elaborated on. Specifically, I would recommend elaborating on the paragraph about COVID-19. I would also recommend adding more to your section on Natural Resources and Geographical Features. This affects spatial inequality a lot, and I think it would help readers to have concrete examples of this inequality. I also think that your article is not very easy to read and understand. You had a lot of jargon in it, and your sentences were very long. I know you explained the jargon, but maybe you could break up your sentences for better readability. You could also add some images like maps and diagrams to make the information easier to understand.

You did a really great job in the creation of this article, and I hope this feedback will help you make it better! --Mmemorablemoments (talk) 20:21, 26 October 2022 (UTC)