User talk:NWeigel/sandbox

Pat's Peer Review
The article is not grammatically correct or clear in what it is saying, so it is very hard to understand. There is also no clear structure to the article, so that can definitely be improved. It can be expanded to add more information.
 * I agree that the article is not grammatically correct in certain places. I am planning on completely rewriting that section of the articale. I am going to give the article a more structured format and expand it to add more information. --NWeigel (talk) 04:15, 2 December 2018 (UTC)

Seth's Peer Review
You have made good progress fixing the problems with the article. I can see you worked on the grammar and made sure to keep things consistent in the article. I also liked how you organized the article into the lead and the manufacturing of the bulk moulding compound. Some work still needs to be done to the second half of the manufacturing paragraph. It is still hard to follow. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sjo uml (talk • contribs) 04:41, 2 December 2018 (UTC)
 * I agree that the second part of the manufacturing paragraph is still hard to follow, and I plan to completely rewrite that section. --NWeigel (talk) 02:00, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

MECH 2960 Instructor Review
I'm excited to see this update to the bulk molding compound article, as it's a type of composite -- I remember when I first learned about BMCs, I came to wikipedia first to get an overview ... and was sadly disappointed! So my former self will appreciate the additions you're working on. My general comments/suggested edits are below

Section "Bulk Moulding Compound Drafting":
 * the "ready-to-mold" should have hyphens in it
 * just as a question, is it always a polyester thermoset? Or are there other non-polyester chemistries that can be used?

Section "Manufacturing":
 * It was unclear to me in the manufacturing section what I would read ... would I read about "manufacturing OF BMCs"? Or would I read about "manufacturing WITH BMCs"? Maybe you wish to break that into two sections, and section titles that talk about how to make the BMC versus how to mold things with BMC.
 * Here you mention that different chemistries can be used, which I think means you need to change your introductory section to just say 'thermoset' instead of 'thermoset polyester' (where I asked above if it's "always a polyester thermoset").
 * Just wondering, any idea why fillers are added?
 * For the sentence "When at high viscosity, the BMC may refuse to flow.", I recommend you change to something a little more technical. It's not like the BMC shakes its head and says "NO, I refuse to flow."  Instead, it's more that the pressure applied is insufficient to cause flow.
 * I think you're implying that if you have too many fibers, they cause too high a viscosity ... however, you don't explicitly state this up front where you say that "this contains ..." Perhaps you want to re-organize to make the flow better, and not leave that detail to later on?
 * Overall, the organization of the manufacturing section could use a little thought, such that you could break up the long final paragraph and instead have paragraphs that have one major topic per paragraph.

Overall I think you've made good progress and this will definitely expand the reader's knowledge!

UML MECH2960 (talk) 23:55, 10 December 2018 (UTC)

MECH 2960 Instructor Review #2
I can see almost all of the changes have been implemented and it really shows -- it reads like a great article! Thanks for posting it on live wikipedia. I've got one or two final suggestions:
 * You have this sentence: "The glass fibers in BMC result in better strength properties than standard thermoplastic products." The word "better" is a very subjective, non-technical word.  Better on what metric?  It might be best to say what property has changed, and in what way.  In this case, you're talking about strength, so has it increased or decreased? You could then use that rather than "better"
 * In technical writing (which an encyclopedia counts), try to always put a noun after the word "this". In your case, it is a problem at the start of sentence "This constrains the amount..." Please insert what the "this" refers to.
 * The new info at the end of the manufacturing section is GREAT!

Thanks for the improvements! UML MECH2960 (talk) 19:35, 13 December 2018 (UTC)