User talk:Nakita Pike/sandbox

Feedback on potential topics
These all look like solid contributions you could make. I'm particularly in favor of adding a Korea section to the Proletarian Literature article or creating an article for Yi Taejun, who really does deserve to have one. It's great that you've already started looking for potential sources--that's half the battle.

I noticed you chose all topics from my list of articles immediately related to the course material. This is not a problem, but note also that you're allowed to work on *any* article related to Japanese or Korean pop culture, not only these. Just wanted to make that clear. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 04:38, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on Project Proposal
The bibliography you and Sayward have compiled looks excellent. I would only suggest that you also check out Sunyoung Park's The Proletarian Wave (http://www.hup.harvard.edu/catalog.php?isbn=9780674417175). There is one chapter of it available as a PDF on the Canvas page under Further Reading.

Eventually the two of you will want to figure out how to divide the writing up so that both of you make substantial contributions. One way to go about it would be listing 4-5 subtopics you want to cover within the section you're adding and then dividing up those topics. Let me know if you have questions or concerns about sharing the load. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 21:42, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Leaney's review:)
You're a good writer. I'm interested in the content even though it is not opinion based, but factual.

"While a large portion the movement in colonial Korea was shaped to highlight the living conditions of the lower and proletariat classes, and in turn, how the Japanese occupation of the country affected and altered this situation, the goals of the proletarian literature movement were not solely for an isolated change and social synthesis in Korea." -This sentence was a bit difficult to understand because it is so long. Not grammatically incorrect, but simplifying it would be helpful for easier reading.

Good job citing a lot and making sure the reader know that this article is based on fact. I enjoyed reading it! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dianaleaney (talk • contribs) 03:00, 7 April 2018 (UTC)

Misha's Review
You write very well! I didn't find any problems with your writing. However, your links for source number 7,5,4,3, and 1 all lead to the login page for a University of Utah student, because you need to be a U of U student to access it. Also you might want to edit your sources a little. The citation is asking for an archive date, and it put the author of each article's name in the "last name" section. Other than that everything looks good! Good job! MishaGriego (talk) 04:37, 7 April 2018 (UTC)

CT Feedback
This is a thorough and well-documented contribution. As I said to Sayward, you may even find that what you two have written is appropriate for a stand-alone article along the lines of "The Proletarian Movement in Korea."

As Misha points out, you'll want to change the formatting of your citations so they're more broadly accessible. You can treat them like print sources even if you found them online. All that is needed in the citation is enough information for a reader to reproduce your research, even if you can't provide a direct link.

I would advise you to add citations directly following both of these sentences: "The proletarian literature movement in Korea was initially driven by the annexation of Korea by Japan in 1910 and the state of conditions that followed within the country. Proletarian literature acted as a movement that attempted to unify Korea against the shift into imperialism and capitalism that was brought forth by colonial Japan and its government that occupied Korea from the point of annexation until the end of World War II in 1945." Even if the citations duplicate the ones if the following sentence, you just want to make sure you're carefully documenting claims that you predict might cause controversy. (See my feedback on Sayward's part too.) Ctextor at uofu (talk) 16:30, 10 April 2018 (UTC)