User talk:Nali12/sandbox

ENGL 305 Peer Review
Hello, Nali12. I have looked over your A Game at Chess edits and here is my input.

In regards to the content overall, I like what you are doing with it, but it does appear to need additional work. I like how you are going through each character, giving them a proper description, and then clearly categorizing them under one of the three charts at the top of your edits section. It does not look like you have finished the process of moving the characters to their respective charts, however, so just keep working on this so that this section can stand on its own while clearly laying out what the reader needs to know about these characters.

On a similar note, I like how you are structuring this page so that it is clear what you need to know about a character and, more importantly, which house they belong to. However, I am not sure if you plan on removing the bottom half of the section that essentially repeats the information that I believe is going in the top half of the section. If this is not your plan, I would suggest that you do this so that you do not have any redundant information.

The balance and neutrality of the changes are also good. You do not try to put more emphasis on one character over another nor do you draw any conclusions about them. Likewise, you avoid using language that would imply that either you or anyone else has an opinion on the matter. Keep it up.

Unfortunately, I personally believe that more work needs to go into your sources. You currently only have one source that is cited for an unknown reason, and your descriptions for the characters, especially those saying that a character alludes to a real world person, lack proper citations. Trying finding some sources so that readers know that your descriptions are accurate.

Overall, it looks like good progress is being made.