User talk:Nantwia1/sandbox

Hi! It looks like you have put a lot of thought into evaluating Quercus rubra. I only see the one topic, and not several. Make sure you have explored a few topics and looked for references that will help you substantially contribute to the article. Red oak is a common plant, so it might be hard for you to find ten primary sources to add information to what is already there. Lethornton (talk) 03:06, 2 March 2018 (UTC)

Great idea about the invasion in Europe. You have good structure for organizing the additions you want to make. Try to research a bit more to get to ten sources that you can contribute. Lethornton (talk) 21:52, 16 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review

Invasion in Europe section

-make component, components

-what do you mean by “it has been linked to lower percentages of trace elements and minerals”? Do you have examples of what types of trace elements and minerals?

Environmental responses section

-1st paragraph:


 * you don’t need the also in however, some opportunities for growth have also been discovered”
 * “the various environmental responses observed…” this sentence has the word various twice. Maybe try several instead for one of them
 * For model tree organism, I don’t think you need the tree part; just model organism should be ok. Or you can say model organism for tree scientists.

-2nd paragraph:
 * “canker pathogen Diplodia coritcola” add comas so that it’s “canker pathogen, Diplodia corticola,”
 * Do you have any information on how the quercus rubra tree fights these stresses? If so, that might be useful to add

-3rd paragraph:
 * “The leaves of the northern red oak has been” should be “have been”
 * “the fungi, which typically proliferate on the stumps of deciduous trees, has been” should also be “have been” and later in the sentence it should be “promote”

-4th paragraph
 * For the sentence that starts with “as a result” maybe change the wording where it says “and resulted in less seed dispersal by animals” so you already used result earlier
 * Maybe start the last sentence differently because tannins sound so random until you read the end of the sentence. So, maybe start with “This is because northern red oaks produce tannins…”

Overall: I really liked your article!

-Organization: Really good. I like that the paragraphs are not too long, but there is enough information.

-Spelling: Really good. I didn’t find any mistakes.

-Grammar: Good for the most part. See edits above.

-Tone: It sounds like an encyclopedia. I don’t see any bias. Everything is clearly fact based.

-Content: Good. Your article has a lot of useful information that is both good for students searching for the tree as well as regular people looking for information on the specific tree. Nsanghani (talk) 03:02, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Instructor comments: Your writing will make nice additions to the current page on red oak. It is not clear why you titled the second section "Environmental responses" when it seems to be about diseases. It would be better to have a section title that is more specifically related to the material that you are getting across. If you do want to have multiple environmental responses, you should have subsections for bacterial diseases, fungus, abiotic stresses, and such. You have a great use of scientific information in an understandable writing style, and there are a lot of links to other pages to help the reader find more information. As you polish your work, make sure to link other words that some one might need to look up. Consider where you want to put your work on the current page to maintain a good flow of information on the species.Lethornton (talk) 22:20, 15 April 2018 (UTC)