User talk:Nas197/Chernoe Znamia

The contribution here is well organized and reorganizes the section on composition to give the more important information first. I have not checked the original sources of the article, but if the segment about the age of members is accurate that should be put back in since it is important to understanding how the group was composed. You do go far deeper into how they were composed on a specific level that makes the section feel more significant than it was before. However, I think the section should be renamed "Composition and Leadership" because it is more accurate to the contributed section. A bit of an overly specific critique, but there should not be a comma between "ethnically" and "Jewish" as it modifies Jewish to understand how these people were considered Jewish. The organization on the section about ideology is okay, but could use some work. The last sentence should be earlier and put right after the sentence that ends with "anti-intellectualist" since it fits into that topic and ensures that the paragraphs are well connected. I do like how the paragraphs there are separated into one about ideology and a second about tactics. Although the title of the section should be altered to fit that structure because it primes readers better than how it exists on the article. Your referenced works are good and diversified, but as you may already know the one for "2" is missing on the page so that needs to be corrected. Overall the article fills the content gap and makes it look far more factual than what existed prior. It does a good job staying neutral, but the point on the attack on the cafe being the most well-known should also be in the lead since it is a strong identifier of the group. Don't forget that footnote marks should consistently be after the punctuation and not before them. Your reference marks are inconsistently either after or before the punctuation marks. RJim312 (talk) 19:16, 28 October 2020 (UTC)