User talk:NavinN95/sandbox


 * break up the paragraphs to make it easier to read. as it is, the criticisms/examples are very hard to read. Also, do not include judgments like "this is valuable because...", Wikipedia is supposed to be neutral. Nothing that says Shuelke (talk) 16:47, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Don't use "voiced concerns." Try subbing the word with "argues."BreezyLBM (talk) 16:58, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Prof read so there will be no run-on sentences--Lwilliams3emu (talk) 17:00, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
 * I would try to avoid asking questions, it may try to sound like a persuasive argument.BreezyLBM (talk) 17:02, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Did some grammatical error fixes. Overall everything seems to be okay. Maybe get rid of that table though, is it really needed? TaylorMarcusStudent (talk) 17:04, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Just like is all of the table needed? What is the point of having the OJ Simpson case on that table??TaylorMarcusStudent (talk) 17:07, 30 May 2019 (UTC)