User talk:Nayib24/sandbox

Megan's Peer Review
Hi Yusuf! I was assigned to peer review your edits!

I am not able to find where you made edits in your Sector article: Syrian refugee camps.

Area Article:

Where will you be placing these sentences? Is this supposed to be in your Sector article? "Many refugee camps have a high statistic of children, who have been deeply affected by the crisis both mentally and physically." I think there are some grammar issues here. Perhaps instead you could write something like "Many refugee camps have a high percentage of children who have been deeply affected by the crisis both mentally and physically." Also, a citation is needed for this sentence.Mgslee (talk) 23:09, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Kim's Peer Review
Hi Yusuf! To the best of my knowledge given the information in your sandbox, my understanding is that you will be centerring your practice experience around refugee work in Larissa, Greece. Given that I’m sure you have discussed your articles with Clare, I was wondering if you would be able to shed some light on how writing about Syrian refugee caps will better your understanding about refugee camps in Greece. Or perhaps, are there some parallels that you will mention in the Syrian wiki page that will connect to Greece?

Like the other peer reviewer, I had trouble finding what exactly you chose to edit. I was only able to read your summaries of what you wanted to contribute on your Sandbox. Nonetheless, here are some points you might consider:

For your Area article, I like how you plan to discuss about the mental and physical crises; I think you could add more concrete statistics on exactly which mental or physical trauma is experienced, how many are known to be affected, what is being done, etc. You mentioned that camp organizers plan various activities - perhaps you can discuss one (one that you may even be participating with during your PE) to expand on how that particular activity is known to be beneficial. For instance, if you will be helping to plan sports activities - what kind/why/what health benefits/any concerns related to the physical intensity of these sports?

You might also consider incorporating more information in the “Criticism” section, which I would expect to have some reports on given the relevance of the Syrian war/refugee crises. What are the pros and cons of refugee camps? Are they truly hospitable? Personally, I think it would be interesting to find some literature on victims and what they say about these camps.

Hope this helps! Kimdo1 (talk) 01:04, 20 March 2018 (UTC)