User talk:Nchun1996/sandbox

Trevor's Peer Review
I think you are off to great start with your article edits. The academic journals you are using for sources seem very reliable. The stigma section is particularly strong as it states the information in a very clear and neutral tone, and its placement within the article makes sense. I like how your peer pressure subsection draws from multiple sources and uses very specific data. However, the structure of your last sentence, "What is more likely...", seems a little awkward and I think could be worded in a clearer way. Regarding your additions to the disease subsection, I think you could add some info beyond the new first sentence. Maybe something about the prevalence of HIV among different types of drug users?

Beyond your content additions, this article is in need of some improvements. Perhaps most importantly, the article makes a number of very specific claims without any sources to back it up. There are also some weird tonal problems such as the original peer pressure section ("beach boys are using drugs...") In addition, I think the lead section needs a lot of work. The lead is supposed to introduce a reader to the topic and summarize the article. However, this article's lead doesn't even mention the actual content, bringing up topics such as public protests and maskani, which are found nowhere else in the article, nor are any sources provided. Overall, the original article is in desperate need of a clean-up.

As a reader, I am curious about the relationship between Kenyan government and drug abuse. What has been the government's response? Have they enacted policies to criminalize drug use or to treat users? I think this would be an interesting direction for the article and it seems like it would be very relevant to our class.

TrevorAppel (talk) 00:03, 7 April 2019 (UTC)