User talk:Ncons009/sandbox

Yeny's Review
You have really put in the time on your article and it shows. You have great in line citation formatting and have integrated good references. I mostly liked the use of the studies to support the information. Is this topic specific to Australia? Maybe add a U.S. section along with incident's in history section. I am sure that many mining incidents have occurred in the past that can be correlated to the FIFO nature of work. I think you did a good job at maintaining a neutral tone and not sounding biased. Also, it it important to have the "other side" of things section as it provides all the facts related to the topic. Not everyone see's FIFO as negative or damaging. Overall it shows that you enjoyed working on this and that you took the time to research the topic and add valuable information. The article feels well balanced and very informative to the public. It helps that the readers (if interested) can be redirected to the studies for more information.

Ymarq013 (talk) 02:33, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Vivi's Peer Review
Firstly I would like to highlight that I really appreciate the "unedited" and "editing" additions next to section titles, it made it way easier to identify the sections I could actually review.

This article is super interesting and not common, great choice! Although the overview is not edited yet I would like to add you could really improve this section of the article by starting it off without a precise definition of Fly In Fly Out.

The first sentence of the "Psychological Effects" section is very strong and has great citations. The wikilink to regional development was on point as well, very well thought of. The "Family" section has strong references, referring to publications but the first couple of sentences are missing citations, adding the citations after each sentence makes the article stronger.

There is good data under the "Worker Mental Health" explaining the effect FIFO workers could experience like drug abuse. Over all this article is very well edited, a good amount of time was spent condensing the necessary info to understand the term. I would only add more relevant information to the US that would help others living here relate to FIFO.

Overall loved the article!Vroig001 (talk) 18:02, 5 April 2019 (UTC)

Prof R Feedback
a unique topic and glad you selected versus the pharma article...it's clear you've done a tremendous amount of research and work improving this article...proofread for grammar (a few minor errors) and what about including the ethics issue you noted (notes to self) about the CSR of companies that employ FIFO? Micalva (talk) 02:24, 17 April 2019 (UTC)