User talk:Nell Curtin/Language exposure for deaf children

Notes from Naomi Hi team. Really nice job so far on the page. Here are my suggestions for what can be improved:

In the first paragraph, it is not clear how having hearing parents is related to language deprivation. Maybe 1-2 more sentences here.

Watch out for language like "while it may feel daunting to parents at first" which doesn't really conform to the style of an encyclopedia entry. This reads more like a letter to parents, or an editorial than a set of factual information. If you want to keep this idea in, you should say who thinks it might be daunting.

You need to define critical period before talking about how long it is.

You have some redundant information across sections, and I wonder if that might be because the headings are too similar. I'd either try to reorganize into new headings, or keep each section really narrowly focused (e.g., the critical period section can be really short, and just say that delays in early language exposure can have lasting consequences for language acquisition).

Wikipedia is international, so you want to be careful not to have an American focus here. ASL is not the only language that is relevant. I'd be sure you always say "sign languages" plural or say "a sign language" or name the particular sign language in question. Also, LEAD-K is an American movement. It is okay not to talk about other countries, especially if you don't have that information, but you want to make it clear that you are describing something that is a US phenomenon. Ncaselli (talk) 18:39, 20 April 2021 (UTC)