User talk:NelsonL./sandbox

Alexa's Peer Review: I think you do a really good job on beginning to explain the different types of fasting patterns. It's really clear, concise and easy to understand, especially for someone like me who doesn't know a lot about intermittent fasting. It's also good that you have used a variety of sources and are touching upon many different areas of fasting like the details on what it is and how various cultures use it in throughout their lives. You're off to a really good start! With the last sentence in the variation paragraph, I think you could elaborate more on that or put it in it's own section if you wanted to talk more about the modified alternate day fasting, but I think that since it's the start of your draft you will definitely have more to add throughout all the sections. Overall, good job! Alexaa746 (talk) 17:20, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi Nelson, you are off to a good start--you've identified a good topic about which there is a lot of interest and this article has the potential to cover a lot of ground (since there is medical application, etc.) though you do not have to write it all. I would suggest that next you work carefully on adding a strong lead section that offers readers a high-level overview of the what/how/why of intermittent fasting (i.e. what it is, how it is done, and why people do it (health, religious, athletic reasons). Then from there you can move into the various subsections that you have identified. You may want to also rethink about the titles of the various sections (possibly changing the title of the Variations section and also the research sections--instead providing descriptive titles--we can talk more about this in class). Amyc29 (talk) 21:51, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

Nelson's Peer Review - Daniel
Hey Nelson, I think you have a good structure leading you to the content of your article. I think that supplying a variations section is a good call prior to discussing fasting in various religions. I would attempt to, at the end of the variations section to maybe allude to the variations that exist in such fasting including the religious variations. That could be as little as simply saying that variations exist amongst different religions, as a segue to the next section but also as an underlying connecting piece to how variations of fasting do not solely have to be religious or not religious but that all these variations fall under the broader spectrum of fasting variations. I believe showing where research could take this and the human and animal research sections are good points to steer your audience towards a more inclusive approach to intermittent fasting. Obviously it would be easier to scope the article with a beginning section but that being said, the sources and the topics demonstrate a strong beginning that seems to be leading you in the right direction. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yacar.d (talk • contribs) 17:31, 26 February 2018 (UTC)