User talk:Nestad1/sandbox

Hi! All of your topics seem quite broad. It is true that they are marked with citations needed, but you might have trouble finding primary literature to talk about the topics. Can you consider going more specific? Have you checked on things like the evolution of flowering plants? Have you looked at the plant biology group for ideas on important topics that need to be expanded? Lethornton (talk) 03:12, 2 March 2018 (UTC)

Good use of links to connect what you are writing to other sections. To meet the requirements for a science class, I would like to see more information from your sources. Instead of "double fertilization has been shown" make sure you are explaining more about scientific studies that contribute information on the topic. Lethornton (talk) 21:19, 16 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review: For organization, it looks well structured and the sentences flow into each other. Since this is a pre-existing article, where do you plan on adding this information? It's too specific to be a lead paragraph, and it isn't clarified so I wasn't sure where you want to put this. Spelling and grammar are good as well. The tone feels a little dry, as there are many long sentences one after the other, making it a tiresome read. Perhaps interspersing some shorter ones might make it easier for the casual reader. Furthermore, I think the topics discussed are a little specific and/or redundant. The beginning seems focused on Gnetum and Ephedra, which brings up the question I had earlier about the placement of your work within the pre-existing article. The explanation of double fertilization appears redundant, since the article does touch upon the subject already. --Nattesd1 (talk) 23:03, 26 March 2018 (UTC)

Instructor comments: I agree with the statements from you peer reviewer. It is not clear how you are going to weave your writing into the other writing that is already on the page. It seems that it might go in the lonely sentence just above the box on the original page. You do need to be a bit careful of your wording to sound more encyclopedic. For example, "has been reported" is quite vague. It would be better to just state the important information. Try reading your work out loud to determine whether it sounds interesting. Are there more examples of plants that you could add to show the variation in how and when it happens? It is great that you are using links to other articles to help readers cross reference and find related material. Keep looking for ways to do that as you polish your work for the final submission.Lethornton (talk) 02:10, 16 April 2018 (UTC)