User talk:Neuroscience34/sandbox

Your work so far seems like an excellent start. I liked your contributions to the first 2 paragraphs. Your edits appear to make the language more accessible to a general audience. However, when you provide examples of "blood-related diseases" in the first paragraph, it would be beneficial to link the words to relevant Wikipedia pages. If this change is not possible, I think you should offer a more detailed explanation of these diseases and how they can lead to the destruction of stem cells.

Moving beyond the first two paragraphs, there is room to improve the article. There are only three sections besides the introduction, and each consists of just one short paragraph. You definitely should continue your efforts to expand on the information already available in this Wikipedia page. For example, you could discuss how PBSC donations work in greater detail. You may also want to add new sections that focus on other subjects related to PBSC. It would be really interesting if you added more specifics about when this treatment is used and how they treatment process works.

Additionally, this article would benefit from a greater number of references. The page cites just 11 sources, and it appears you have only listed two new references. I'm sure you will inevitably include more sources as you continue your research. Nevertheless, I felt I should call attention to this matter.

Fantastic job overall!