User talk:New Rookie Editor/sandbox

'Comment: Great job. Very thorough,'
Phoenix Spoor (talk) 20:51, 15 April 2021 (UTC)

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Nice work, NRE. This refines the material nicely, making it more precise and accurate. As you refine further, work to make the language even more concise. For example, the phrase, "The first was to adopt similar language to California's law that reminded jurors that they were required to adhere to the law" could be tightened to: "The first was to adopt language similar to California's law requiring jurors to adhere to the law ...." You are very close to finished! --Jbdolphin (talk) 07:16, 14 May 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review: Hi Hector! I think that your edit is great and I definitely see how the structure that you presented in your suggested edit would make the original writing a bit more cohesive and overall comprehensive. I think you did great here, as of now I don't have any suggested changes. Great work! --Jessicarios627 (talk) 08:06, 20 May 2021