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Hi Nhi I liked the article but the mutation bias section is a little confusing. I think you should just make it longer and use less scientific words. After reading it twice I got it, but it might be hard for someone who doesn't know much biology.

Good references, @nnkarma12

Hi Nhi, I think your article is well structured and covers the most important parts of germline mutations. I would suggest expanding on parts that you find interesting. There were a few small grammatical errors so you should look over and read it out loud to yourself. Lydia bluestone (talk) 16:52, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Kat's comments
Hi Nhi,

I think you've done a really good job so far. I like your use of scientific terminology linked to appropriate Wiki pages. I would caution that if you are using a scientific term that does not have its own Wiki article, it would make the article more accessible if the term was briefly defined. I would concentrate on cleaning up grammar and citations within the article, and possibly adding some more material to sections if desired. It might be worth it to include some information about the role of de novo germline mutations (as opposed to inherited mutations) in human disease, if you can find quality sources.

Nice work! -- Katbartlow (talk) 17:53, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi Nhi,

Your article is looking even better. I'd continue to pay attention to minor points of grammar (most importantly, use "spermatozoa" instead of "sperms"), and to citations -- there are a couple facts stated in the article with no sources backing them up. I'm also a bit concerned with your image and your table. They aren't showing up correctly when I look at the page, and I'm also concerned that they may be from a copyrighted source (Elsevier textbooks generally aren't licensed for free reuse). I think that the things you want to show with the image and table are good, but I'd try to find an image showing the same concept that you can use without violating copyright. As a final point, I think it might be worth explicitly pointing out the difference between germline mutation and normal sources of genetic variation (e.g. crossing-over).

-- Katbartlow (talk) 18:58, 18 April 2016 (UTC)