User talk:NicHT495/sandbox

OK. Now let's figure out if they are "notable" enough for a wikipedia article. Profhanley (talk)

feedback
You'll need 4 or 5 objective, reliable, independent sources to establish the notability of the topic. How's that going? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Profhanley (talk • contribs) 18:20, 6 March 2019 (UTC)

sourcing
The sourcing seems to be coming along - - though the band's bandcamp page won't satisfy Wikipedia criteria for sources. Can you find any reviews of the band's work and/or interviews? Profhanley (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 16:49, 18 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your information here is pretty solid, I can't think of much that would necessarily be lacking for a band's Wikipedia page. The lead is fitting, I think it gives the viewer a good sense of Bambara as a whole. There was one bit inside it that sort of confused me with the wording though, "Bambara is a post-punk band from Brooklyn, New York. Formed in 2009 in Athens, Georgia". It's explained later in your article, but i recommend rewording that bit just because I couldn't really tell what you meant (how were they from Brooklyn if they formed in Athens, Georgia?). Overall, your article is weighted very well among sources and sections. I like how it's organized as it is, though I do recommend putting the band members earlier since people are likely to be more interested in that, especially because it's short so easy to blow through if you aren't interested as a reader. Your article is perfectly neutral so far that I can tell, purely informative as it should be. You also have tons of sources, which is awesome because you have plenty of verification among them like the kind of genre they are. That said, one of your sources, "oh my rockness", seems to be more of a blog than a reputable source. You also listed the genre as "blues" in your info table, but I didn't see that anywhere in the sources you listed (I could be mistaken though). You also seem to run close to "close paraphrasing" in a couple sentences. I found "A more stripped down version of swarm" in your article and in source 6, as well as "ghoulish tales at a dive bar". I'm not positive this violates the plagiarism rules of wikipedia but just in case I would suggest you look into it. I think that's the most important thing to look at just because it could be a hassle down the road, and personally I think it's important (and difficult to catch!). All said the sheer number of sources you have lends you a lot of credibility just because they back eachother up, which I think is great for any article, including my own. Solid stuff so far, good luck with your edits! Renegadeknight3 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 07:44, 15 April 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Ethan495
You've done a great job covering this topic. It is organized very well and provides a lot of information. The only thing you may need to revise would be the lead section. I just feel like it could be a little bit stronger. The lead should present the band energetically. Possibly add more information about the genre they fall into (noise rock). I do like that you included their record label. But I noticed there isn't any more information on it really, except for in the lead. Possibly consider adding a section for that information and moving that passage.

other than those two small things to consider, your topic is about ready for final draft I'd say. Ethan495 (talk) 15:33, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

GtG
Ready to publish. Though take a look at your peer feedback to dot any i'e and cross any t's. Profhanley (talk)