User talk:Nica88/Painted turtle

Article Review - BC
First of all, I really like the structure of whole article and also have few suggestions.I like the way about explaining seasonal routine and hibernation mechanisms of painted turtle. I feel like you could include a section more about painted turtle and their characteristics as your topic is all about painted turtles. This might be helpful for other people in science and non scientific readers. Moreover, adding images related to painted turtles might be more helpful. In conclusion, the article is very promising. Best wishes for further part. Ctngirl (talk) 03:56, 25 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Hello Biva,
 * Actually, my wiki entry is the section on Anoxia Tolerance. The section on "seasonal routine and hibernation mechanisms" is already part of the Painted Turtle article. I'm adding a section on anoxia tolerance. Nica88 (talk) 19:11, 27 October 2022 (UTC)

Article Review
Overall, a great and simple enough summary of anoxia in turtle. I think you were able to synthesize very well all the most important pieces of information, in a way it will be accessible to all readers. You may consider adding a sentence on the "Anoxia" page of Wikipedia that very briefly describes anoxia in animals, that way you would be able to hyperlink both pages to each other. I think you should define the term "sequester." Maybe adding how long the Southern painted turtle is know to srvive anoxia might be interesting. Also, a few minor edits/suggestions on grammar: "Painted turtles essentially hold their breath until the following the (remove: the) spring when the ice covering the pond melts." "carbonate content ever (substitute "ever") recorded among animals." "hatchling western painted turtles do (remove: do) have a high anoxia tolerance and freeze tolerance," — Preceding unsigned comment added by Huginnscientia (talk • contribs) 04:44, 2 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Hello Huginnscientia,
 * I fixed the grammatical errors you mentioned in your review. I also added how long the southern painted turtle can survive under anoxia. Additionally, I decided to add how long the eastern and midland painted turtle can survive under anoxia. Regarding your suggestion about linking to the anoxia page, I decided not to do it since I already provide a definition of anoxia. Nica88 (talk) 22:23, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Article Review - TT
In general, I think that your section on anoxia tolerance in painted turtles is really informative and well-written. I also like how you link to other articles on wikipedia with hyperlinks. I just have a few suggestions. First, I understand that there is already another section on seasonal routine and hibernation mechanisms, but you may want to add a bit more text regarding the relevance of differences in anoxia tolerances among sub-species with respect to seasonal changes and hibernation. In other words, add a bit more ecology text to your physiology text. Second, you mention "buffers" as a noun and include a hyperlink to the relevant wikipedia article, which is great. But, I think it may become confusing later when you use "buffering" as a verb. You may want to make the connection between buffers and buffering explicit. Third, I would reduce the number of times you use "however" as a transition. In general, this word makes it seem like the first paragraph is changing directions a few times, which disrupts the flow of the text. I have read that it is sometimes useful to structure each paragraph with "and, but, therefore" transitions, using each only once and in that particular order. TigerTrash (talk) 23:15, 7 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Hello TigerTrash,
 * Thanks for your feedback. I addressed your first comment by mentioning that anoxia tolerance depends on sub-species population range, lactate accumulation rate, and buffering capacity. Regarding your second comment, I do not think that the term "buffering" will be confusing. I provided a link to another Wikipedia article which describes how buffers work. Finally, I followed your suggestion and used the word "however" only once in my revised article. Nica88 (talk) 01:21, 6 December 2022 (UTC)