User talk:NicholasOrnstein/An Introduction to Cybernetics/

Dearest peer reviewers, some sort of cohesive draft will be done by 7pm Thursday !! pinky promise.

NicholasOrnstein (talk) 21:04, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Overall, I think that the information that you have gathered for your article is solid. I like your use of book reviews for your sources–I did a similar thing when I wrote a section of my article about a book. Your tone is consistent, correct, and neutral. However, I think that your lead is too large. It would probably benefit your article to move much of the information in your lead into a section in the article proper. Additionally, your table of contents is useful, but it would help to give an overview of each section if you are going to list them. Additionally, it would be helpful to flesh out the "Key Ideas" and "Influence" sections, which seem fairly threadbare at the moment. Should these sections be fleshed out, possibly with information from the lead, I think that this could become a fairly robust Wikipedia Article.

--JoFraDe (talk) 21:09, 14 February 2020 (UTC)