User talk:Nicholas grant18/sandbox

Well done giving a thorough summary and response to the article evaluation questions - Kquave (talk) 19:38, 11 September 2018 (UTC)

Yusuf's Peer Review
Your additions of affirmative action changes under both the Obama and Trump administrations are thorough and well-suited since they provide a more contemporaneous understanding of the issue. That being said, here are a few suggestions I had in mind:

1) For the college board quote, I feel it would be more effective if you paraphrased the quotation and explained the phenomenon in your own words as opposed to simply using the rather long sentence followed by a colon.

2) When you mention that the Obama administration sought out funds in an indirect manner, I think it would be helpful if you elaborated more on what this means. How was it indirect? What were the implications their actions?

3) When mentioning the Fischer vs. University of Texas Supreme Court case, elaborate on what this case was about, how it began, and what the public's reaction was to the decision.

4) Possibly provide more information about the Harvard case regarding Asian-American discrimination in admissions.

Sparkle's Peer Review
Your writing is very informative, well-written, and doesn't leave space for much error. I thought it followed Wikipedia's guidelines. I only have a couple ideas for you to add and improve on: 1. You should go deeper into explaining what is affirmative action and how it affects race. Maybe can further mention the effects of affirmative action (for example, was it successful or its drawbacks) towards the end of the article; 2. Go deeper into explaining what occurred during the Fisher vs University of Texas and how that led to affirmative action; and 3. elaborate on why Trump's administration was so against affirmative action because it almost sounds bias.

Chandler's Peer Review
I think that your writing it very well done and follows the wikipedia guidelines. I think that you should go further into affirmative action because it is just mentioned and I think you should go into more detail and explain its implications. Maybe mention why the Trump administration was so against it and further elaborate on the court case Fisher vs. University of Texas at Austin. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cmcdowell3 (talk • contribs) 19:11, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Anjali Sankar's Peer Review of Article Addition Your addition is very thorough and well thought out; everything is described in full detail. This is a very interesting topic as well; good job on keeping the audience engaged and curious for more information throughout. Your addition has great organization and structure throughout as well! One thing I would do to enhance this addition is show more parallelism between the two administrations, as well as compare/contrast situations to make the paragraphs a little more similar, instead of simply describing each administration and its accomplishments/actions. Don’t delete anything that you have so far, I would simply reorganize some sentences in order to expand on the topics and/or add new, “similar”/paralleling ones to each! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Anjalisankar (talk • contribs) 03:36, 22 October 2018 (UTC)