User talk:NiciaD/sandbox/Kiev

Evaluation by Arakuresacred
Spelling/grammar: Meets standard In the sentence which begins, "In a just over a 100 year time span.." the grammar seems awkward to me. Also, in the second to last sentence in the last paragraph which includes, "and is the largest Ukrainian Jewish community.." , " is" has no subject.

Language: Meets standard

Organization: Meets standard

Coding: Exceeds standard

Validity: Nearly meets standard Perhaps the census hasn't been updated by the Ukrainian government since 2001, but the data feels a bit obsolete because of its age.

Completion: meets standard

Relevance: Meets standard

Citations: Exceeds standard

References: Exceeds standard

Good job Nicia!

3/18/2018 Evaluation by acidgirltogo/Jessica Dvorak

 * Points: 41.5/40
 * Grade: 103.8%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard /Few Errors = 4pts

"there were 1,748505 residents in Kiev as of January 2018." - Should this number be formatted to look like this: "1,748,505"?

"There has been immigration to Kiev from within Ukraine as well as from other countries, but there has also been substantial emigration leaving Kiev." I think it needs another comma to read "There has been immigration to Kiev from within Ukraine, as well as from other countries, but there has also been substantial emigration leaving Kiev."

Language
Nearly Meets Standard / Occasional Contraction, Informal Language = 3pts

"One long occurrence of population decrease" - This feels clumsy and strange to me. I might word it differently. Like, "One extended period of population decrease"

"the average age of a resident in Kiev" - An average is not a single resident. An average would include the ages of several individuals. Should probably read "The average age of residents in Kiev"

"The Jews in Kiev are first mentioned in a 10th century letter." - The individuals in my life that are Jewish have stated a discomfort at being referred to as "A Jew" or "The Jews", instead preferring "Jewish". So, I would think that rephrasing this to say something like "The Jewish population in Kiev is first mentioned in a 10th century letter." or "Jewish individuals in Kiev are first mentioned in a 10th century letter.". Though you might ask the instructor.

Organization
Meet standard / Good Paragraphs and Headers = 4pts

Coding
Exceeds Standard / Perfect = 4.5

Validity
Exceeds Standard / Solid Information = 4.5

Completion
Exceeds Standard / Complete = 4.5pts

Relevance
Exceeds Standard / No Irrelevant Content = 4.5pts