User talk:Nick S. Lance/sandbox

MaKinlee's Peer Review
Your article is looking good so far! I think the edits you have made make the article flow better and more clearly. The only thing I would suggest you do is to take out in the second paragraph (a.k.a). I would add a sentence stating "people also refer to him as..." or something to that extent. I feel that contribution would make the article sound more formal.

Response Thank you for the feedback. Your suggestion was very helpful and does make the article sound more formal.

Christian Stowe
The information here offers valuable insight into the article as well as what can be done to improve it. Such thorough analyzing is interesting to see.

Claim
Consider changing "may be the earliest" to "is one of the earliest". "may be the earliest" sounds too much like a claim in my opinion. Benc1021 (talk) 15:27, 22 October 2018 (UTC)Ben Collins

Response Thanks for the feedback. This minor change does eliminate the uncertainty of "may be the earliest". — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nick S. Lance (talk • contribs) 17:15, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Lexi's Peer Review
The citations you added were a nice addition to the article. I would find more parts of the article to add to or edit. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Arperk8974 (talk • contribs) 15:31, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Cassidy's Peer Review
Good information, maybe give more background on Saungm Furro. Your information flows well and has good detail, nice job. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cechil (talk • contribs) 15:37, 22 October 2018 (UTC)