User talk:NicoleCastigs17/sandbox

Instructor feedback for article draft
Nice start overall. Here are a few suggestions for improvement as you revise.

For the background section I'm not sure if you are intending to keep the first paragraph (from the existing article) or if you are planning to delete it and replace it with the second (new, I'm assuming) paragraph. Be careful about describing what Petronio was doing or thinking unless you have a way to support that perspective. The sentence "This was a journey that Petronio..." seems to reach a bit and I would remove it. The "on a mission" in the next sentence is too colloquial in style.

The family as a context for learning about privacy section is good. I think you can bring in more sources to support these ideas however.

The online social media paragraph is good too, but be careful about the scope of privacy management here. Try to use the lens of CPM to describe how privacy boundaries on Facebook might be working and influencing relationships. Try not to editorialize. For example, saying that "the line should be drawn between a teacher and a student once a classroom setting is no longer present" is more opinion based language that should be avoided for an encyclopedia style. This comment applies to the sentences about parent-child privacy in this paragraph as well.

The health communication paragraph is good. You should cite the same source (or other sources) later on in the paragraph as well because the information is coming from that source.

The self-disclosure in the workplace paragraph is good in terms of content. Try to avoid colloquial phrasing though. For example, the phrase "let's face it" is too informal. Generally, I think there could be a little more content added. Think about creative ways to include content to existing sections or add new sections.

Remember to use proper APA style throughout. The added references are not in accurate APA style. You will likely need to manual edit the citations rather than relying on the Wiki citation tool. Also, look to see how to use the same source in multiple places so that it does not create a duplicate citation in the "References" section. Jrpederson (talk) 19:32, 15 October 2019 (UTC)