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Placenta Praevia Peer Review Content
Researchers have speculated that regional variance in prevalence of placenta praevia may be attributed to differences in ethnicity, diet, and other factors, none of which have been studied.[1]

Rates of placenta praevia in Sub-Saharan Africa are quite low, however this disease has been linked with various negative outcomes for both the mother and infant. The most common maternal outcome of placenta praevia is extreme blood loss (hemorrhage), which in turn is a major cause of maternal and infant mortality in countries like Tanzania. Risk factors for placenta praevia among African women include prior pregnancies, prenatal alcohol consumption, and insufficient prenatal care.[4] Placenta praevia is more common in North Africa than Sub-Saharan Africa, but the continent as a whole still has the lowest prevalence in the world.[1] (Maybe start with This disease has been linked with various outcomes... Then when you get to the sentance about Tanzania; While rates of placenta praevia in Sub-Saharn Africa are quite low it is a major cause of maternal and infant mortality...)

In North America, placenta praevia is more common among White women than Black women.(Any known reason why?) Additionally, more cases of placenta praevia are found in women who come from low-income which is thought to be related to insufficient prenatal care and low quality emergency labor & deliveries in those areas.[1]

Placenta praevia in Europe occurs in about 4 out of every 1000 pregnancies. In Latin America, it occurs in about 5 out of every 1000 pregnancies.[1]

Mainland China has the highest prevalence of placenta praevia in the world[1], measuring at an average of 1.24% of deliveries.[5] Specifically, placenta praevia is more common in Southeast Asia, though the reason for this is unknown. China’s high prevalence of placenta praevia is speculated to be a result of pregnancy in women ages 35 and older (Advanced Maternal Age) or in women who have had a prior Caesarean section. In comparison with other Asian countries, it is much less common to have placenta praevia in Saudi Arabia or Israel, but slightly more common to have it in Korea.[5]

The continent with the second highest prevalence for placenta praevia is Australia, where it affects about 10 out of every 1000 pregnant women.[1] (Elaborate?)

(Overall looks like a really good start!)

Colettedepardieu (talk) 02:42, 16 November 2018 (UTC)Colettedepardieu

Mark's peer review of Loffler's syndrome initial draft
To start off, "a variety of white blood cells" doesn't seem to be necessary in the first sentence as the term eosinophil is already linked to its respective page. When naming the specific parasites, be sure to italicize their species and genus. There's also an extra space between "rashes" and "and" in the second to last sentence of the first section that can be easily fixed. The "The" doesn't seem necessary in the last sentence of the first section as well.

"To determine" seems a bit odd in the last sentence of the second section as it doesn't really fit the sentence structure.

It might be better to omit the "many" from "many authors" in the first sentence in the last section because it might be implying a bit of non-neutrality. "Authors" would do just fine there.

Since this is just an initial draft, I'd say you're doing fine as well as content goes and I'm sure you'll add more soon. So I'd like to see more content overall. Also I noticed that you did not include any references in your draft, so that's a bit alarming (although I'm sure you have them somewhere else). Obviously, make sure you get your sources in and make sure that they're reliable and neutral.

Not bad at the moment, but I'm sure you can put the work in to improve it :) Mkompsie (talk) 09:31, 20 November 2018 (UTC)