User talk:NicoletteLynne/sandbox

Hey Nicolette I reviewed your Wikipedia article and here is some feedback:

I think that the changes you have made so far are definitely improving the article. You have made a lot of changes on the introduction, which is great because comparing it to the original article it is concise and clear. The term is now easy to understand; however, I would make a couple more changes on the introduction. I feel like you should mention the Horn effect on your introduction to make sure the reader understand that these connotations can be either positive or negative. I do not think you that there is a need to quote the example, it is something you can create elaborating on the topic. The changes you made on the history section are important since you provided more detail that helps explain the use of the term. I am not sure of the need of the cognitive bias section, at first is a little confusing and I feel that the relevant parts of this information should be added to the introduction. Sources need to be added to back up this information. You have good sources but I would like to see articles more focused on the Halo Effect and maybe some source from Edward Thorndikes since was fundamental on the creation of this term.

So far I think you are doing great, I was able to understand the information clearly.

Thank you for the opportunity to review your article,

Angela.P.E (talk) 02:53, 14 November 2017 (UTC)