User talk:Nidhipatel826/sandbox

I would try to include some recent research if possible. It might be hard because your disorder is very rare. I believe your mechanism needs some work. Also, the treatment and prognosis can be expounded upon some more. You have a great idea and good structure thus far though! -Atish Shah

So far your page is pretty good! The information you have is informative and explains the condition well. I think some recent research is definitely needed as well a mechanism, but you describe the causes very well. -rebecca murphy — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brickelephant (talk • contribs) 19:50, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

- It seems like you have a good start to your article - The abstract is good, you can add more details by talking about the epidemolgy of the diesase - All the other sections you touched on but do not have much details except the basic information but everything is a good start. Just be sure to include all the components in every section. - Charmila Sabbani — Preceding unsigned comment added by Charms022 (talk • contribs) 20:06, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 05:07, 25 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Abstract should not have a section title.
 * Nice abstract, although it could use a little more fleshing out.
 * All sections need more detail, missing mechanism & Recent Research.
 * Add links and citations.
 * Do not talk to a patient. Write an encyclopedia article.