User talk:Nikki sato

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=Evaluations=

1/30/2018 Evaluation by Ctardif5

 * Points: 36.5/40
 * Grade: 91.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Does Not Meet Standard No significant spelling errors are present, but many grammar errors are present and in need of revision. The first sentence should be reviewed and updated, specifically from "but was interesting" to "an Etruscan one". In the next sentence"their"should be "its","artistic" should be "art". Many more grammatical and syntax deficiencies exist that should be changed prior to publication, but I do not want to point them all out to you and deprive you of the learning opportunity!

Language
Nearly Meets Standard There are no first or second person pronouns exist, but there is some presumably unintentional bias that needs to be neutralized. For example, "interesting" in the first sentence indicates a personal feeling or experience related to the content, and is not fully neutral. "Importance of" should also be removed from the second sentence, as it assigns value/judgment to factual information, which is not appropriate or necessary for Wikipedia.

Organization
Meets Standard

Coding
Exceeds Standard

Validity
Nearly Meets Standard There is no invalid or false information, but multiple sentences are incomplete and not concise. Review the last 3-4 sentences, as they indicate ideas about historical Florence, but do not actually provide data or factual information.

Completion
Exceeds Standard

Relevance
Meets Standard Most of the information is relevant, but the paragraphs relevance could be improved with the inclusion of more factual information (dates, specific events, etc.).

Quick Notes
Hi Nikki,

Since I happened to glance over this, I put in some code on your sandbox page to separate the references to your article evaluation from references for the First Edit assignment material. That way the grader doesn't think that you're citing Wikipedia to support the edits which are supposed to be in Wikipedia (would be redundant). When referring to Wikipedia, it's best to use hyperlinks, rather than citations. Hyperlinks do not suffice as actual citations on which to ground your statements, however. (I once also had some edits rejected on those grounds.)

Also, referencing Encyclopedia Britannica is something you really should avoid. I should maybe have made it explicit that sources like Wikipedia and Encyclopedia Britannica are tertiary sources, and your articles should use primary and secondary sources, with a very strong preference for peer-reviewed academic journals, which are secondary sources.

Above, Ctardif5 has some very good suggestions for you, and is grading you a lot nicer than the grader will be doing. Make sure you address those things.

Best!

DrMichaelWright (talk) 12:27, 1 February 2018 (UTC)

2/27/2018 Evaluation by Ctardif5

 * Points: 39.5/40
 * Grade: 98.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard Spelling is mostly in good shape, and the primary issue I found is where Shakespeare was misspelled. Grammar could be improved. I would encourage you to read over the edit and consider where commas could be added or word choice modified to make the edit flow better. For instance, the last sentence of the first paragraph should have a comma after "As mentioned" and "tragic" should instead be "tragedy".

Language
Meets Standard No major issues but reading through and improving the language to be more concise may lead you to a higher grade with the instructor.

Organization
Meets Standard I would look at the formatting of the festival section to make it stand out better. Perhaps change/shorten the title or make it bold like a sub-header.

Coding
Meets Standard No issues identified.

Validity
Meets Standard No incorrect information appears to be present, but it does seem that more details could be added so that ideas are based in fact. For example, including the amount of annual visits to Juliet's house or something of this nature would improve the validity of your edit.

Completion
Meets Standard I would encourage you to include some content to serve as a preface to the festival section.

Relevance
Exceeds Standard All content seems very relevant.

2/27/2018 Evaluation by Jaridgway

 * Points: 39.5/40
 * Grade: 98.7%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard Spelling is mostly correct. Check spelling and spacing between words/punctuation.

Language
Nearly Meets Standard No large issues, I would go back through and smooth over the language that sounds a little choppy.

Organization
Meets Standard Perhaps add an image

Coding
Meets Standard No issues.

Validity
Meets Standard You could add more detail to paint a better picture of festivals etc.

Completion
Meets Standard I would add more details.

Relevance
Exceeds Standard Seems relevant.

Evaluation - Brescia Economy

 * Points: 42/40
 * Grade: 105%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Standard Spelling looks good.

Language
Meets Standard

Organization
Exceeds Standard Well done, relevant information.

Coding
Meets Standard No issues

Validity
Meets Standard You could add more detail to paint a better picture of festivals etc.

Completion
Exceeds Standard Well done

Relevance
Exceeds Standard Seems relevant.