User talk:Nikkimats/sandbox

Nikkimats Great article selections, I see that you've assigned yourself Kintu on the dashboard - excellent choice that needs lots of updating. I look forward to seeing your improvements! Gardneca (talk) 08:07, 12 March 2019 (UTC)


 * More excellent work so far! I like the citation you added to the Kintu article. Remember, you can draft future additions in the sandbox if you prefer that to working directly on the article itself. If you can get your hands on the other sources listed in the article, you might be able to add direct citations too. Great job! Gardneca (talk) 00:39, 29 March 2019 (UTC)

Nikkimats I just wanted to make sure you saw that your peer review article is here and not in your draft sandbox talk page. I hope that's okay (feel free to copy and paste it over)! Gardneca (talk) 06:58, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

Nikkimats' Peer Review
Lead Section: The lead section of your article draft is really good. It is informative about what the rest of Kintu's article's going to be about and is a good length for a summary. I would say that every sentence in your lead section is necessary and important to have so that a reader knows the gist of who Kintu was and why he is important in Ugandan mythology. I think that your lead section does reflect the most important information about Kintu. I don't think anything is missing or redundant.

Structure: Yes, there is a clear structure (lead section, background, references). However, I think that there could be more sections or sub-sections under the background information because some of the info comes from different stories/resources. The sections are split into a reasonable order that makes sense chronologically.

Balanced Coverage: Nothing in your article draft is off-topic. However, I think that there could be more organization in your "background" section because it seems to get a little confusing due to the different resources you used. I think that the background section could be split into two sections, Kintu in Introduction to Mythology and Kintu in The Historical Tradition of Busoga. This way, readers will get balanced coverage from both myths since although they involve some overlapping characters and story details, they involve different aspects of Kintu's background. All the information you wrote about is relevant to Kintu as a mythological character. You could try to add more to the background section of each story because a reader who knows nothing about Kintu may need more information regarding the Ugandan myths. You article did not draw conclusions and did not contain any bias that may sway the reader one way or another.

Neutral Content: I think you did a really good job keeping the content neutral. I don't think that there is a way to take a stance on Kintu as a character in mythology but I think you did a nice job portraying Kintu exactly as he was portrayed in the myths. There is no persuasive wording that makes Kintu seem like an exceptional or terrible character, you just described him as the scribes of the myths did. There are no words or phrases that don't seem neutral. There are also no points in your article where you make a claim for an unnamed group. The only time I was wary of this when reading your article was when you stated, "He is also considered.." but did not say who or what group consider him a certain way. Besides that, I think you did a really good job with this. I think you showed who Kintu is as a character in a truthful way.

Reliable Sources: Both of the sources that you cited are reliable. Both are published articles from credited authors. As I stated above, I do think that you could have more of a balance of each of the articles, which could be done if you split the background section into two sub-sections, each explaining the two different versions of the myths according to the different sources. Other than this, I think you did a good job with your sources. Lstofko (talk) 08:53, 14 April 2019 (UTC)Liv Stofko


 * Lstofko thanks for your straightforward and comprehensive review. Nikkimats I agree with the suggestions outlined above, and I think that your next steps are going to be to really try and find some additional bibliographic citations for this myth to build up your page. You have a nice, clear writing style, so feel free to expand the story a bit, and spend some time diving into the library/online sources to try and find more versions and/or interpretations. Going forward you should pay attention to the pages your classmates are creating for Warumbe (DragonDale) and Nambi (Lstofko), look at the peer reviews each of them have received, and help each other out with sources since you're all working on figures in the same myth. I think this page is going to be a huge improvement from what was there before, keep up the good work! Gardneca (talk) 07:36, 17 April 2019 (UTC)