User talk:Njstein77/sandbox

The recommendation to link to other articles rather than include so much information under botany makes sense. Jmmcabee (talk) 05:01, 18 April 2017 (UTC) jmmcabee

Comments on Ideas Draft
I like your suggestions for adding sentences to those two pages. Adding a section about adhesion sounds reasonable for Hedera helix. You should make those changes regardless of which topic you end up choosing. Make sure you keep your audience in mind- what is the intent of someone likely to be searching with those terms? Looks like you found a few good sources. Jmmcabee (talk) 18:55, 26 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on Article Revision
Your sentences look good and should be added to the Hedera helix article, even as you work more on the Bioadhesive page. Try to find references like reviews that can be used to represent a lot of information instead of a reference for every little piece of information. Jmmcabee (talk) 20:59, 10 May 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Article peer edit (Felipe Rodriguez)
This is a really cool article. The second sentence sounds just a little clunky when read out loud, but i think a few small tweaks would fix the flow such as: "This is accomplished through a complex method of attachment starting with adventitious roots (try linking to this article if it exists) growing along a host stem and making contact with the surface.The adventitious roots then extend root hairs that range from 20-400 μm in length securing Hedera helix to the surface" (changes are bolded)

"The glue-like substance is a nano composite adhesive that consists of uniform spherical nanoparticles 50-80 cm in diameter in a liquid polymer matrix." In this sentence do you mean 50-80 nm? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Frod6580 (talk • contribs) 00:34, 22 May 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review (Victor Quach)
The article is incredibly clear, detailed and maintains neutrality. As mentioned above, the second sentence is a bit awkward in structure. I second the revision as suggested by Felipe. In the sentence, "Chemical analyses of the nanoparticles detected only trace amounts of metals, once thought be responsible for their high strength, indicating that they are largely organic," perhaps follow up with an explanation of the metals if the notion that they contribute to strength is outdated? Does the metal content imply that they're organic? VQuach42 (talk) 01:45, 22 May 2017 (UTC)