User talk:Nlp2015/sandbox

General
You do not need an overall title for the page. Wikipedia will do that for you. If you leave that out, the rest of your table of contents box will format properly. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Good and consistent citations. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Abstract
Good overview, with summary of prevalence. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Very thorough abstract, includes all categories mentioned in the rubric.

Mechanism
You may want to address the swelling in other places as well. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

A good concise explanation of the overall mechanisms.

Symptoms
Could use some copy editing for grammar. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Includes most information present on the rubric. I couldn't find any for my disease, but any numbers, stats, or rates associated is a part of the rubric.

Causes
Is weight gain during exercise a risk factor? I would expect that to be more a symptom or warning sign of excess water retention. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Convers all information from the rubric.

Research
I look forward to seeing summaries of these research. Once you have those, these papers should just be listed as normal citations in the references section. Sweiner02 (talk) 19:24, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

I'm glad you found three articles for your recent research. Now just the summaries need to be added.


 * Style: appropriate reading level, follows wikipedia style manual, and good job with your links.