User talk:Nmccarth2

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Hello, Nmccarth2, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Your sandbox is User:Nmccarth2/sandbox. Please use that, rather than your user page. Chris Troutman ( talk ) 00:32, 19 November 2017 (UTC)

Feedback
Feedback on your edits to kitten


 * Kitten

This won't work. Wikipedia articles are supposed to describe what reliable sources have said about a topic, they can't advocate for a particular position. You can't tell people what's right or wrong, even on a topic like feeding kittens.


 * Kitten


 * This is unsourced. Everything you add to the article needs to be supported by reliable sources. This is especially true in a case like this, where you're making specific, numeric claims.
 * You need to start a section by talking about that thing. So you need to describe the role of nutrition in establishing immunity. Background information like this might be OK to add after, but you need to get the main point in first.
 * The last sentence, again, is agenda-focused.

Kitten

This is too much like offering advice, which is against Wikipedia policy. You could say something to they effect that they're often fed kitten food at that age, or that it's recommended (and by whom). But the focus should be on describing what's done or what's recommended.

This is unsourced.

Kitten


 * Again, this is unsourced
 * The first sentence is background information that's explained in much greater depth at the protein article. Just link things like this.
 * Instead of saying that cats are "naturally" carnivorous (and ambiguous statement since "natural" has no firm definition) and require "high amounts of protein", provide sourced information about the amount of protein needed.


 * The first sentence is filler. It doesn't include any specific information.
 * The information here isn't specific to kittens - in fact, the first reference is to an article about adult cat dietary requirements. Make sure that you're adding information that's specific to kittens, and that comes from a source that's about kittens. Otherwise if doesn't belong in the article.
 * "Since felines are carnivores, it is expected that they will consume taurine with each meal." Expected by whom? Why? This sounds like you're speculating.

Kitten
 * Avoid "therefore"; it sounds like you are drawing a conclusion. If you're going to make a statement like this, explicitly connect it with your source. Especially since this is a statement of intent about cats, not an observation about their behaviour.

Leave out the first part, since it's clearly giving advice, which is against Wikipedia policy. Talk about the less developed carb digestion, talk about the problems with high-carb diets for kittens, but leave out the should.

Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:24, 20 November 2017 (UTC)


 * You also used a source about bovine colostrum. Cats, obviously, aren't cattle. You need to find a relevant source. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:26, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

User: Ian (Wiki Ed) thank you very much. Can you check my changes? Nmccarth2 (talk) 19:29, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

Edit summaries
Hello Nmccarth2. I hope you're enjoying your experience editing at Wikipedia. I'd like to make a small request: that you begin using edit summaries. Doing so will make it easier for your fellow editors to understand the reason for each edit you make. Sometimes the reason is not clear, and even when it is, it can take time to figure out. (Those of us with forty billion articles on our watchlist are very conscious of time.) Please see Help:Edit summary for more information. Rivertorch FIREWATER  17:40, 8 December 2017 (UTC)