User talk:Nmyoung1/sandbox

Peer Review

After reading over your draft I thought your group did a great job on finding good information for each topic. I think it is very organized. The part where I think you should add more to is the media section. I think it is all negative information in regards to the media, was there any positive information you guys have found? or was all the information regarding the media just negative? I think adding positive information to the media section would help because it would make the page no seem so bias. If there is no positive news regarding the media, then maybe add more to why the FBI, government, and community was so against them and there beliefs. I also think you can add a bit more to the introduction, in terms of giving small points of what the rest of the article is going to be about. --Biancaalvarez (talk) 22:40, 10 November 2017 (UTC)