User talk:Noahtalamantes/sandbox

Alec Barretto's Peer Review This article was an interesting read. It focused on a very specific topic, which I think is great for this particular assignment as there may not be a lot of previously existing information on it. I think that you breaking the article down into four different sections made it easier for the reader to comprehend the information and understand the tone of the writing. I feel that in addition to what you have already written, it could improve your article by mentioning the significance of the racist and unfair prison system on society. The article already does a good job of stating facts, which support what it trying to be accomplished, but it could perhaps use a little bit of causation of how this prison system in South Africa is affecting the society. In any case, your article presents an adequate timeline structure of the South African prison system. It begins with how the colonial superiority influenced racial and ethnic hierarchies within the prison system, and finished with post Apartheid era. This allows the reader to see how the prison system has progressed over time. Barrettopaul56 (talk) 21:21, 6 April 2020 (UTC)