User talk:Nramberg/sandbox

Hi! Your suggested edits and additions to the article 'climate change feedbacks' are great! Especially since the article is very vague around the processes and implications of chemical weathering on climate. I'm sure there are plenty of great sources out there of academic literature on the topic, which you can include in your assignment. I also think that more information could be added to the section 'Le Chatelier's Principle' for example, how the strength of the oceans solubility pump can act as a climate feedback. It's mentioned briefly in the article but more detail and clarity could be added. Great work! (Fls098 (talk) 20:43, 25 February 2019 (UTC))
 * Hey there! Thanks for the suggestions and input. There was definitely a lot of sources providing a more in depth explanation about the chemical weathering process.  I'll try to look into expanding on the Le Chatelier's Principle section with some primary sources.  Thanks again for the feedback! Nramberg (talk) 19:46, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review for Nramberg
Hi! I’m specifically reviewing the section titled “Chemical Weathering” here.

This section is well written and goes over the feedback loops in a lot of detail. I like how, even though this concerns the topic of climate change (which is contentious and hard to write about), it was kept very neutral and factual and no conclusions were drawn. It is obvious that a lot of research went into writing this section, however, only one source is cited. Consider adding more primary sources as well as review articles and secondary sources (since Wikipedia likes these). Additional sources will also help back up your statements and make things appear more neutral and unbiased.

As far as the structure of this section, I like how it was split into negative and positive feedback loops - maybe create subheadings for each of the feedback loops.

There are references to earlier sections in the Wikipedia article (“as mentioned earlier”) that may not be necessary or fit the typical format of a Wikipedia article. These phrases could be removed or replaced with “In the carbon cycle…” or “Carbon cycle feedbacks dictate that…” (or whatever you think works best).

A diagram would really help with the visualization of these feedback loops! It would help to support the text descriptions better and help readers that might be new to climate feedbacks.

Also, what you said in the positive feedback loops section about greater cooling efficiency allowing plants to grow larger leaves and increasing canopy size (etc.) could definitely tie in to the Net Primary Productivity section of the article!

Overall, great job!ATekatch (talk) 00:10, 21 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Hey! Thanks for the suggestions, I definitely have some cleaning up to do in terms of sentence structure and flow. I agree that adding secondary sources would strengthen my sentences. Thanks again!Nramberg (talk) 00:38, 25 March 2019 (UTC)