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On the "Human Beauty" section, the only cited form of male beauty is the "Bishonen" concept from Japan, meaning beautiful youth. It describes and ansthetic that can be found in East Asia. A young man who's beauty and sexual appeal transcends the boundary of sexual orientation. This is a young boy who posses many feminine traits, most described as tall slender little to no muscle or facial hair. Talking in context of the TV world these such boys are usually played by female voices [User talk:Nsuggs619/sandbox].

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Article: Amazons I chose the article about the Amazon women. It gave a lot of background information so you could really get the history of how they came to be. They operated the history by the mythology aspects, things they did and what they stood for. This is a B class article so it is very well developed and creator of this article didn't get off topic and really stayed to what he was talking about. There are not any biases in this article its all information about the origins and the timeline of the Amazons. There are no personal view points or opinions on the amazons. All of the highlighted words lead to different articles that give you information about that word or name. There is a huge list of citations at the Bottom of the article that are cited and give you an exact link to wear they got the information. I check to see if the information was formed in their own words or copied word for word and they create it through their own words and there were no signs of plagiarism. Lots of the information is no older than 2016 which is pretty recent and what I consider recent is in he past 3-5 years. There isn't any missing information this article is full and rich with specific information about the amazons. On the talk page of the article its people saying the geographical location of the amazons is up fro debate as in there are lots of different places that were said they originated at. Also other names that are attributed to this article people on the talk page had a lot of background information about that. Overall the article is well developed and has lots of information and sources of where the original information comes from. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nsuggs619 (talk • contribs) 00:53, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
There are a few grammar/spelling errors in the first part:

"Women of this time used -to- wrap" "During the Ming Dynasty their for of bras were" (weird sentence structure, wrong form of "there") "They us-ed- metals"

There are several others, overall the wording is kind of difficult to understand and the article would benefit from proofreading. The citations in the first part also need to be put into the correct Wikipedia format. Overall kind of disjointed and needs some work to make a cohesive article.

In the second section, there is some biased language when the author makes a statement about "-most- women." The second section was much easier to read. When you click on the links of the sources, they lead to articles with various scholarly sources cited, so the sources used in this article look to be suitable. KatieElizabeth (talk) 02:12, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

I think it may be beneficial to add your citations as links, to make reading smoother and easier to follow. For example saying this site is where you got so and so information. Just an idea. You have a lot of good information! --Catubbs (talk) 15:08, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Response- Julia Pickar
Thank you for editing our article on bra, it helped us figure out which parts needed more clarification and where to fix grammatical mistakes. In response to who edited my section, "Health Concerns With Bras", I am going to fix the section where it seems I made a biased remark. Instead of "most women" I am going to add "women who tend to wear bras..." to not suggest or assume all or most women where bras. Also I plan on fixing the grammatical errors within the first paragraph to make it more clear for readers to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Juliapickar (talk • contribs) 16:49, 26 March 2018 (UTC)

peer edit responce
hello, KatieElizabeth and Catubbs this is Zinab, thank you so much for your comments on our work. we still working on finishing and organizing our article and that is why maybe you seem to have trouble with understanding the ideas. we will work more on that thanks again for the advice. Catubbs I am so glad you seem to see that we add helpful information so far. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zainabansour (talk • contribs) 23:42, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Response- Aaesha Alsaqer
You are welcome, For the importancy of clarifying each section of the article and avoid grammatical mistakes so the reader easily can get main idea's of the topic , and for the suggestion on "Women who tend to wear bras" its absolutely right in the way that all women's have the choice either to wear bras or not. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aaeshaalsaqer (talk • contribs) 00:18, 28 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer review Alaura Johnson
Hey Nicole, it's Alaura

Overall I think you all have a solid foundation, a few typos but that can be easily fixed. I didn't see much other issues.

I went through all of the sources you used and I think they're pretty solid. One thing I learned to use is the CRAAP test when trying to find sources. C-currency (how current the source is ) R- relevance of the source A- authority (who's presenting the source. For example, a painter wouldn't have the same skills as a baker) A- accuracy (how legit is the source information) P- purpose (is the source relevant to the topic?)

This test always helps me, and I see that your first source is from back in Mid 2014. It doesn't take away from the accuracy of the source, yet it may be good to use more up to date sources. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ajohnson99590 (talk • contribs) 02:37, 28 March 2018 (UTC)