User talk:Nswanson24/sandbox

Kyle's Peer Review
'''First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?'''

I think the article does a good job of explaining tinnitus in a neutral way and giving lots of supporting references and evidence to back up the claims. I was impressed at the number of references, which should mean that everyone working on the article made sure to cite all their statements. By reading the article, I was able to get a clear view of what tinnitus is. I liked how you added a section on prevention programs under the "prevention" section, as that is certainly one way to help prevent tinnitus.

'''What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?'''

I think you're on the right track to improving the article by re-wording certain sentences to make things flow better. I felt there were some areas where the flow of the article could be improved. Since there is so much content already in the article, I feel like there isn't much that needs to be added in terms of new sections. Under the "alternative medicines" section under the management heading, it might be useful to add something about those over the counter "tinnitus treatment" pills you can buy in the store, since it's good information to know that there is no evidence to support they work.

What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

I think one thing you could do is make sure the statistics about the number of people with tinnitus under the "epidemiology" section haven't changed because the statistics are kind of old (from 2011 and 2013). Under the "Diagnosis" and "Audiology" section, it might be good to have a citation to back up the claim that "the pitch of the tinnitus is often in the range of the hearing loss".

'''Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!'''

My article is about noise dosimeters, so I didn't really see anything in the article that is related to noise dosimeters in any way. The only potential thing that relates is that tinnitus can be caused by NIHL, which is what we hope to prevent with a noise dosimeter and a hearing loss prevention program.

Overall, I think you are on the right track and doing a great job with editing how some sentences are worded. Keep up the great work! krh12 14:31, 20 February 2019 (UTC)