User talk:Nuniw18/sandbox

Zmattingly Peer Review

Hello! You've done a very thorough job! This article looks great, the information is specific and your sources seem official and reliable and contribute to the overall discussion of the immense breadth of this topic.

I would move the bit where you define the profile developed of what an illegal dumper is to the beginning, it feels like this is your lead. I also think it's beneficial to give that definition before you discuss the types of materials dumped. I also liked that you included examples of this problem in countries like Italy and China as well, as well as including validating research.

You could additionally include a portion on how to legally dispose of that which is commonly dumped.

Your paper is well sourced and it has inspired me to be more thorough with my own sources and textual citations.

Zmattingly (talk) 20:11, 15 June 2018 (UTC)

Wiki suggestions
Wow. Just wow. It already looks like a well rounded Wiki article already with your numerous sources and large amount of information and background. Somethings I think you could add to further improve your already amazing article would be to:

- The first paragraph in “Causes of Illegal Dumping” should go in the section above.

- Wiki says only first letter of first word is capitalized for heading, though I’m guilty of it too since it looks better to me.

- Maybe separate each point in a sub-header for “Effects of illegal dumping”

- More links to key words or ideas, especially diseases and the like.

- Change “Decrease motivation” to maybe “provide alternatives” and “increase risk” to something like increase surveillance or rule enforcement. Then you could combine the decrease motivation and increase legal options in same header of “Provide alternatives”

Other than that fantastic job and I look forward to the finished product!

--Kamori25 (talk) 02:52, 19 June 2018 (UTC)