User talk:NyanaMorgan/sandbox

Sela's peer review

This seems like a great addition to the article and touches on some really important examples and points about transgenerational trauma. My edits are only small ones; I think what you have is great as far as content goes. The examples you chose do a great job of exemplifying what transgenerational trauma actually looks like.

In the first paragraph when you mention parents limiting emotional responses of children, I think it may be beneficial to clarify which parents / when this happens. It definitely makes sense to me that this is an example of how transgenerational trauma occurs, but since slavery officiallly ended over a century ago it would probably be helpful to clarify if these parents are the children of people who were enslaved, other descendents of enslaved people, etc.

Some small mechanical changes are: I would change this sentence: “Some of which include descendants of those who experienced chattel slavery, veterans, as well as victims of sexual abuse and poverty. “ and just word it like this “this includes the descendents veterans, survivors of sexual abuse, people who experienced poverty, and people who experienced chattel slavery” or something just to clarify that it’s four different things, because I got a bit lost in the wording of that sentence.

I think there might be a word missing in this sentence: “The treatment of slaves, where they were essentially forbidden from having emotional reactions at all.”

Also, in the second paragraph, I would change the – to a comma to help the sentence flow a bit better for readers.

Other than that, it looks like you have great sources, and as long as you put the footnotes in after every citation of a study in the paragraphs that seems good to me. I also noticed that you mention veterans in the United States and abroad, so I think that if you use that wording you just have to be sure you’re citing studies that got results for the United States and another country at the end of that sentence.

Overall I think this is a super important addition to the article and ties in well with the other group members’ work! I liked how this helps give real-world examples of the ‘transmission’ that other group members focused on, because especially as someone who had not known much about the topic I felt like your section helped tie it all together for me.