User talk:Oac2113

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Hello Olivia,

Overall I think you have done a great job that has significantly improved the quality/ completeness of the wikipedia page, considering how little there was before. It is interesting to learn that Crotch's bumblebee has been under protection of CESA as a result of being classified as a "fish". However, some parts could have further polishing. First, the lead paragraph could be a little more detailed. Maybe move some demographic information / add original discovery description to the lead? Secondly, the structure could be further improved if you move the physical appearance section before or right after "habitat and diet" section. And it might be beneficial to add a section describing something about the organism's behavior, ecology, and ecological significance ( I am assuming they pollinate as well?). Lastly, the bibliography and in-text annotation is manually edited. There is a very handy way of doing citation using "cite" button on the sandbox page.

Best, Jerry Dimondguan (talk) 14:21, 15 October 2019 (UTC)