User talk:Obaggott06/sandbox

Flip's Evaluation: Overall, it seems to me that your main objective in working with this article was to add information to fill apparent content gaps in many of the women-based subsections, while also largely reorganizing the article to make it more understandable and less convoluted with repeated/unnecessary information. In general, I found that you did a very good job of doing so with the edits you have proposed. I thought your decision to describe the Econowives within the Feminism section was certainly beneficial to the article because it removes the need for another subdivision for explanation. However, in the information you added regarding the Econowives, specifically the sentence that begins with "When asked about...", I got a bit lost in the wording. I think you could clean that up a little bit just to make it easier to follow for the reader. In my reading of your edits that was the only potential issue that caught my attention, and it definitely is minor. I really like the rearrangements you plan on making, I think such changes will greatly enhance the flow and approachability of the entire page itself.

Maya's Evaluation
You did a great job rearranging the article to make it appear more organized. I like how you are working to make the feminist section have more information because it is a big portion and theme of the novel that Atwood seems to touch on the most. Before you made these edits, the article did not do the theme of feminism that is portrayed within the novel it's justice. However, I would work to make the paragraph a little more organized. The information that is included is really great and important information, but it seems a little confusing to read. Also, maybe moving the descriptions of the different types of women that are displayed within the novel and also the "Settings" portion of the article under the feminist section could be a good idea. Overall, great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mayadray (talk • contribs) 03:01, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Response to talk page
Flip and Maya both said similar things about rewording and better organizing my additions to the feminism section. Flip noted that my sentence on Econowives was a little hard to follow because of the wording, and Maya noted that my paragraph was a little confusing to read. Both of them also liked the restructuring edits I proposed and the additional information in the Feminist Analysis section. Based on their feedback I will definitely work hard on rewording my additions so that they flow and are easier to read through. I already proposed to move a lot of subsections into the Feminist Analysis section and to delete some sections all=together, and Maya suggested I take it even further with more of the "Setting" subsections, which I definitely want to do moving forward. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 141.161.133.112 (talk) 18:14, 3 December 2019 (UTC)