User talk:Ocris1/sandbox

Peer Review
1. Everything that is to be added is unbiased and neutral. 2. It is obvious that you have done your research since what you are adding is a great addition to the article. 3. Seems that you were able to add citations but it appears there may be some small errors so just double check. 4. Your additions are well written and easy to understand. You also use precise language that helps make your statements understandable. 5. Each additions are well written, fully done edits, and include citations. Slesl1 (talk) 18:02, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

I have edited the sources and made sure that they were put to wikipedia's standards. Now there is no errors with the citations.With Savannah's other comments, I will look over my edits to make sure they are as good as she says they are. Ocris1 (talk) 18:37, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

1.) Your ideas are very clear and each idea that you stated is backed up by textual support.

2.) You have made it clear that you want to add certain sections to the article but maybe state what the importance of adding that paragraph would be and how it would contribute to the article.

3.) The language used in the article and from what you would like to add is very clear and professional.

4.) Everything that you have added is very neutral, it is good that you do not show favorites or what side you support in the argument.

5.) For each fact or idea that you have contributed, you sited your source which proves the information to be reliable. Jasminbarrows11 (talk) 18:21, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

From Jasmin's review, I have nothing to change with my edits. I will look over my edits to make sure I agree with Jasmin's statements. Ocris1 (talk) 18:37, 30 April 2018 (UTC)