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Article evaluation: Pirogue

Not everything in this article about the Pirogue boat is relevant to the topic. One thing that distracted me was the last sentence in the page that was about misunderstanding a song lyric. However, none of the information in the article appears to be out of date since the boat hasn’t changed since it was created. This being said, there could be a section included in the article about how the boat is currently used for either recreational or professional use.

The article could be considered to have a Louisiana bias since it has a whole section about the boat in relation to Louisiana even though it has been used all around the world. Because of this, one viewpoint that may be overrepresented is the American viewpoint of how the boat is used here.

The links work and support the claims made in the article. Though, not all the facts referenced in this article are backed up with a reliable source. For example, one of the links is a blog post. However, the rest come from museum links. They are neutral sources though.

There aren’t many conversations happening behind the scenes on this topic since it is a niche field of interest. This article is rated as a Start-Class and as Mid-Importance on the WikiProject Fisheries and Fishing and as Start-Class and Low-Importance on WikiProject Africa.

This wiki article doesn’t have much to do with what we have covered in class. However, it is related to the way we’ve discussed how to show proper scholarship on Wiki.

Ojanders22 (talk) 00:13, 18 September 2018 (UTC)

Editing an article: Prostitution in Israel
For my edits, I added some information to the page "Prostitution in Israel." The information I included were from news articles, a museum page, and a government website. This information included history on where the women that are either forced into the trade or willingly come into it typically originate, plus, current status on prostitution within Israel and how laws may change in the country.

http://www.justice.gov.il/En/Units/Trafficking/HumanTrafficking/Sexualexploitation/Pages/traffickingisrael.aspx https://www. jewishvirtuallibrary.org/prostitution-2#4

Drafting contributions: Prostitution in Israel
History: -Was practiced by both male and female prostitutes and the Hebrew word "zenut" applied to both common and sacred prostitution

-Biblical times--> prostitutes accepted as a deprecated member of Israelite society; shameful profession and people were advised not to make their daughters prostitutes

In Talmud and Halakahah: Many opinions expressed in Talmud about prostitutes and if they could marry priests. The Halakahah made a general prohibition on the professional prostitute.

Post-Talmudic Period: Any act outside marriage was considered to be prostitution. There were some brothels in the outside of cities.

End of middle ages- men who hired prostitutes often was required to divorce his wife

-Modern Period: Prostitution is known to increase in times of chaos. At the end of 19th century- high Jewish involvement in the “white slave trade” = trafficking of women across borders for prostitution. Impoverishment led some women to get into prostitution full time or part-time. Women couldn’t support themselves; this was the only way to do it

-(Late 19th century) The difficult situation in Eastern Europe made it easy to get Jewish women to be prostitutes. Uneasiness between official toleration of prostitution and public discomfort began to go away as prostitution grew across Europe and the US. WW1 interrupted white slave trade – also slowed down as Jews moved up the economic ladder.

-The collapse of USSR made many Soviets come to Israel. Some brought prostitution with them- women came either voluntarily or bc of deception. Open immigration policies in the Law of Return made this possible. By 2004 Israeli gov’t and women’s groups started to increase the prosecution of leaders of criminal rings and rehabilitation of victims.

Past Problems: -Women believe they're being brought to the country for domestic work or for brief work in prostitution that would bring them large amounts of money. When they are aware that they're being brought for prostitution, they believe they will receive a large amount of money. -Estimated 3,000 women smuggled into the country a year between 1990's and early 2000's, many of whom are first or second generation immigrants. -Women were typically sold for $8,000 to $10,000. Israel started acting when the US was threatening sanctions for their actions although the punishments they made were light.

Currently: -New patterns of prostitution report less abusive conditions and prostitutes are believed to receive 50% of the fees for their services. However, there are still threats and humiliating treatment. These less abusive conditions may come from Europeans using less coercive measures such as less drug and alcohol dependence. -Legislation being passed that would put fines on clients of prostitution. It would not put the fine on a criminal record. If the defendant sues against it and loses, the fines will be raised. This method does not punish the person who is performing the work, keeping prostitution legal in the country.

Some prostitutes responding to men on website Sex Adir where people can purchase and review sexual exchanges with prostitutes. These prostitutes usually respond when men rate or comment negatively on their bodies.

Testimonial: a woman who had a posititve experience with prostitution- "“Suddenly I had the chance to make 15,000 euros in two weeks. Also, and I know this may sound weird, but I really liked traveling, as well as working with my clients.”

Rabbis view's on prostiution: "It turns out that some rabbis over the ages have ruled that a man may have sex with a woman whom he met in a distant country, on condition they not do it openly, and that he wear black throughout the act in order to be reminded of his shame. Some others have ruled that a man may have sex with an unfamiliar woman if they it is done in secret and nobody can see him."

Ojanders22 (talk) 16:17, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

Response to Peer Review
I liked the suggestions given in my peer review. My favorite suggestion was to put testimonials in it from women who have been affected or have been a part of the industry in Israel. I think this would be a helpful addition because it would make the article more personal. I also believe showing the difference between secular and religious understanding and views would be helpful (like suggested) because they are two very different viewpoints, plus, prostitution was very linked to religion. There was also the suggestion to define how many people are pushed into prostitution because of human trafficking. I think this is also a good suggestion because sometimes it is looked over how many people are pushed into prostitution not by their own choices, but by other people's will. The only thing I think might be difficult is finding past problems with prostitution because I feel the only way that this information could be found is through old new articles that may be hard to find or somewhat inaccurate. I also feel like this also might be the case with the testimonials, nevertheless, I feel like they would be cool additions to the articles. Overall, I feel like these suggestions were all helpful and will improve the quality of my article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ojanders22 (talk • contribs) 00:25, 15 November 2018 (UTC)