User talk:Okaitline/sandbox

Great potential edits. Use the next week to draft your contributions and get them transferred to the article page.Professorcravens (talk) 21:31, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Your edits are well-structured and well-informed. There doesn't seem to be any bias and it flows well with the rest of the article. Good job.WarrenforPrez (talk) 22:37, 24 October 18

Meg's Peer Review

It looks like you have some great ideas for potential edits! One suggestion I have is that you talk about a single article you used for a lot of information for your potential edit -- I suggest you research a bit more and find more facts and reliable information to back up your claims. This will allow for the least amount of bias possible and will allow you to form even stronger knowledge on your subject. Good luck! Mmwilli (talk) 22:38, 26 October 2018 (UTC)mmwilli

Savannah Hinde The contributions to the Wikipedia article School Prayer is overall great in quality. It spoke on American public opinion in a neutral tone that offered statistics from a relevant and trustworthy source. However, though the source is trustworthy, the entirety of your edit only had a single source. I would recommend diversifying your sources as it gives different perspectives. It also creates greater credibility to your addition. One sentence I would look at again is “Although the topic has many opponents.” This is a bit vague and I believe that there is a way to be more specific than “many.” Finally, I was wondering if this piece should be under the section Ongoing Debate or as a smaller section beneath United States since it is specific to America. SavannahHinde (talk) 22:53, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

KaNesha's peer review
The article does give a clear overview of the school prayer within the first paragraph and within the sections of each individual country. It would help to include more history towards the beginning or even explaining some of the bigger terms or words within the first paragraph. The article does go into explain how school prayer has evolved in each country, but where did it actually come from where is the prior history of how the school prayer was established in the first place. There seem to be some bias or not enough research on school prayer in some countries the United States section explained and drawn out the evolution of school prayer, but for other countries the information was a bit slim. Overall it s a good article and is aligned with the topic/title. The links for the page all were good and worked. They each referenced an area in the article.