User talk:Olcottmarshall/sandbox

A couple of things:

-in the intro section, consider taking out the years that Downs was a professor. Keep the stages of professorship if you want, but the years, it seems to me, break up the flow of the section.

-the beginning of the tularemia section is a bit awkward, you might consider rephrasing this

-the tense of the second verb in the first sentence of the fluorescent lighting section disagrees with the other verbs in the sentence. picky on my part, sorry.

-finally, the reference section needs a heading.Kathvand (talk) 15:56, 18 October 2017 (UTC)